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2014-09-19 · 첨삭 강사 Naomi

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Hi Oh, I don't know why I forget not to use capital. I'll focus to use capital. humm.. Today I'd like to write about food because I'm hungry. Eating delicious food is one of my favorite happy thing in my life. When I eat delicious food. I feel happy. Specially, When I'm hungry. For example, After play a soccer or work out with my friends, eating some dilicious food, like chiken , I love that moment. However you know, It means that work out is going to be useless action. I love to try eating new food. When I was in America, I love a chipolet. It's sort of fusion food. It' mixed with Maxican food and American food. There are more reasons that I love it. First of all, Prise. Prise is not expensive. It's kind of fast food. But, It looks like healthy food. However, It's not. My cousin said chipolet has very high calorie. But, It could't change my mind. I kept eating a chipolet. Now, I'm in seoul. Sadlly, there is no chipolet. I miss a chipolet. bye!

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]!^^ TGIF   How are you? You were absent yesterday, I hoope you are in a good condition. YOur writing for today is not that bad. Keep on improving.^^   I love discovering different kinds of food too from differenbt countries. So nice.kkk^^   See you! -T.Naomi   Hi >>Hi,Oh, I don\'t know why I forget not to use capital. >>Oh, I don\'t know why I forget to use capital letters. I\'ll focus to use capital.>>I\'ll focus on using capital letter.( focus is always with the preposition on)humm.. Today I\'d like to write about food because I\'m hungry.>>correct Eating delicious food is one of my favorite happy thing in my life.>>Eating delicious food is one of my favorite and happy things in my life. When I eat delicious food. I feel happy. Specially, When I\'m hungry. >>When I eat delicious food, I feel happy. Specially when I\'m hungry. For example, After play a soccer or work out with my friends, eating some dilicious food, like chiken , I love that moment. >>For example, After playing soccer or working out with my friends, eating some delicious food, like chiken. Oh, how I love that moment. However you know, It means thatwork out is going to be useless action. >>However, you know, It means that working out is going to be useless. I love to try eating new food. When I was in America, I love a chipolet. It\'s sort of fusion food. It\' mixed with Maxican food and American food. >>I love to try eating new food. When I was in America, I love chipolet. It\'s sort of fusion food. It is mixed Mexican food and American food. ( Chipolet is uncountable so don\'t use article a) There are more reasons that I love it. First of all, Prise. Prise is not expensive. >>There are more reasons that I love it. First of all, price. The price is not expensive. It\'s kind of fast food. But, It looks like healthy food. However, It\'s not. My cousin said chipolet has very high calorie. >>It\'s a kind of fast food. But, It looks like healthy food. However, It\'s not. My cousin said chipolet has very high calorie. But, It could\'t change my mind. I kept eating a chipolet. Now, I\'m in seoul. Sadlly, there is no chipolet. I miss a chipolet. bye! >>But, It could\'t change my mind. I kept eating chipolet. Now, I\'m in Seoul. Sadlly, there is no chipolet. I miss chipolet. bye! ( Seoul is a proper noun, so capitalize it)

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