Hello~!

2014-09-23 · 첨삭 강사 Naomi

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Hello~ It's been a while to write eassy. Today, I'd like to write about a chiken because I love a chiken There are a lot of kind of chikenes in the Korea. And It's one of the most popular food. People enjoy eating a chiken with beer. The popular chiken is fried chiken. OMG.. lol It's sooooo yummy. Actually, i ate a chiken yesterday too. I love wings, too. When i was in America, I ate a lot of wigns. First time, I didn't understand why wigns are so popular in America. However, After eating some wings, oh my god, I met the new world. There were a lot of flavors. And then many sources. So you can choose level of spice. The best restaurant is bufflo wings for me. They have happy hours. So, When I go there in happy hours, I can eat wings just 75 cent per one wing. I think It's reasonal price. And When I eat it with beer~ oooooooh. I miss that moment. But, I heard that a lot chikens dead every days. But I can't stop to eat a chiken...

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]!

 

It was fun reading your message. But! There is a big BUT! I am satisfied with your capitalization but not with the use of articles and your spelling! OMG

Try to search the basic rule on using the articles. When talking about uncountable noun don\'t use articles.

 

Oh! I love buffalo wings too, sweet and spicy style.

Sounds heaven.kkk

Suddenly, I am craving for it.

 

See you later!

-T.Naomi

 

Hello!

>>correct
It\'s been a while to write eassy.
>>It\'s been a while to write an essay.
Today, I\'d like to write about a chiken because I love a chiken
>>Today, I\'d like to write about chicken because I love chicken.

There are a lot of kind of chikenes in the Korea. And It\'s one of the most popular food. People enjoy eating a chiken with beer.

>>There are a lot of kinds of chicken in Korea. And It\'s one of the most popular food. People enjoy eating chicken with beer.

The popular chiken is fried chiken. OMG.. lol It\'s sooooo yummy. Actually, i ate a chiken yesterday too.
>>The most popular is fried chiken. OMG. LOL! It\'s sooooo yummy. Actually, I ate chicken yesterday too.

I love wings, too. When i was in America, I ate a lot of wigns. First time, I didn\'t understand why wigns are so popular in America.

>>I love wings, too. When I was in America, I ate a lot of wings. At first, I didn\'t understand why wings are so popular in America.

However, After eating some wings, oh my god, I met the new world. There were a lot of flavors. And then many sources.

>>However, after eating some wings, oh my god, I met the new world. There were a lot of flavors. And then many sources. ( Hmmm, do you mean source or sauce or spices?)

So you can choose level of spice. The best restaurant is bufflo wings for me. They have happy hours.

>>So you can choose the level of spiciness. The best restaurant is buffalo wings for me. They have happy hours.

So, When I go there in happy hours, I can eat wings just 75 cent per one wing. I think It\'s reasonal price.

>>So, When I go there during happy hours, I can eat wings just for 75 cent per wing. I think It\'s a reasonable price.

And When I eat it with beer~ oooooooh. I miss that moment. But, I heard that a lot chikens dead every days.

>>And When I eat it with beer, oooooooh. I miss that moment. But, I heard that a lot of chickens are being butchered every day.

But I can\'t stop to eat a chiken...

>>But I can\'t stop eating chicken.

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