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2011-02-22 · 첨삭 강사 Connie

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hi ~ today is my friend's birthday. so, we went to vips,family restarant. we ate lots of food. after we ate lunch, we went to market and buy some food. and we came back to dorm by bus. i'm so tired now. so i think that i will go to bed untill 8:00 byebye~~

강사 첨삭

Birthdays are great!! We get the chance to bond with the special people in our lives, our presence during their day is already a mere expression of how important they are to us! So even if you forgot to give her a present the best thing is you were there to celebrate with her. T.Bianca hi ~today is my friend's birthday.>>Today is my friend뭩 birthday.so, we went to vips,family restarant.>>So we went to Vips family restaurant.we ate lots of food.>>We are lots of food.after we ate lunch, we went to market and buy some food.>>After  our  lunch, correctand we came back to dorm by bus.>>Then, we went back to the dorm by bus.i'm so tired now.>>I feel  so tired right now.so i think that i will go to bed untill 8:00>>So I think I will go to bed at 8:00pm.byebye~~ >> bye

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