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2014-09-30 · 첨삭 강사 Naomi

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Today, I'd like to write about badminton. Before I went to America, one of my friend suggested me to play a badminton. Usually, When we said "playing a badminton, It means just light a exercise. I mean that It can't makes me exhausted. So, When I went there for badminton, I was shocked. It was totally diffrent with what I thought. Badminton is really super a hard sport and fun. At the first, I played with old women. (Usually, people play a badminton double) Me and my friend were one team verse old wowen were one team. I thought that It would be a easy game or just It couldn't be a game. However as soon as played a game, I realized that I was wrong. We were defeated. Of course our minds were distoryed. But, It maked me interested in badminton. After that day, I played a badminton twice of week. But, these days I can't. I don't have a time for it. I want to play a badminton. bye...

강사 첨삭

Good day [이름]!

 

Over usage of articles! badminton is uncountable so no articles and \"it\" is small letter except in the beginning of a sentences or after a period and not comma.

 

Keep improving! But in a way [이름], Good job! You are did your part. Learn from your mistakes.

See you!^^

 

Eat well for dinner.

-T.Naomi

 

Today, I\'d like to write about badminton. Before I went to America, one of my friend suggested me to play a badminton.

>>Today, I\'d like to write about badminton. Before I went to America, one of my friends suggested to me to play badminton.

Usually, When we said \"playing a badminton, It means just light a exercise. I mean that It can\'t makes me exhausted.

>>Usually, when we said \"playing badminton\", it means it is just a light exercise. I mean that it can\'t make me exhausted.

So, When I went there for badminton, I was shocked. It was totally diffrent with what I thought. Badminton is really super a hard sport and fun.

>>So, When I went there for badminton, I was shocked. It was totally diffrent with what I thought. Badminton is a really super hard sport and fun.
At the first, I played with old women. (Usually, people play a badminton double) Me and my friend were one team verse old wowen were one team.

>>At the first, I played with old women. (Usually, people play badminton double) Me and my friend were in one team versus old women who were also in one team.

I thought that It would be a easy game or just It couldn\'t be a game. However as soon as played a game, I realized that I was wrong.

>>I thought that it would be an easy game or just it couldn\'t be a game. However as soon as played a game, I realized that I was wrong.

We were defeated. Of course our minds were distoryed. But, It maked me interested in badminton. After that day, I played a badminton twice of week.

>>We were defeated. Of course our minds were distorted. But, it made me interested in badminton. After that day, I played badminton twice a week.

But, these days I can\'t. I don\'t have a time for it.

>>But, these days I can\'t. I don\'t have time for it.

I want to play a badminton.

>>I want to play badminton.

bye...

>>Bye.

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