hello
학생이 쓴 원문
this weekend , i spent my time to prepare contest about smart grid.
I doubt you should know it, jeju is preparing to start smart grid.
so many company and goverment invest in jeju.
smart grid is a eco-friendly business and it is a kind of sustainable
development. as you know, my major is tourism management and i don't know how to work smart grid. but you know what?
in the future, many company will come to jeju to hold a convention or exhibition about smart grid, and they need person who is in the know about smart grid. moreover, many employee will come to jeju. and they need a tour program. so my friend and i am making a teambuilding program about that. it's too hard for us because we lack of professional knowledge . but we like to prepare it .
have a nice night!
강사 첨삭
Wow! You are seeing a big picture for a big future for your career and for the successful and continuous tourism promotion of Jeju Island. I'm not just sure if I got you right. Are you planning on making a program for tourism or on smart grid? Or a tourism program on smart grid? Tell me more about that tomorrow.
Have a good dream and a beauty rest tonight, dear [이름]. ^^
It's always me,
Joanna
this weekend , i spent my time to prepare contest about smart grid.
>>This weekend, I spent my time preparing for the contest on smart grid.
I doubt you should know it, jeju is preparing to start smart grid.
>>I doubt you know about it. Jeju is preparing to start a smart grid.
so many company and goverment invest in jeju.
>>In this way, lots of companies and government offices are investing in Jeju. (Or)
>> In this way, lots of companies and government offices will be investing in Jeju.
smart grid is a eco-friendly business and it is a kind of sustainable development.
>>Smart grid is an eco-friendly business and it's a kind of sustainable development.
as you know, my major is tourism management and i don't know how to work smart grid. but you know what?
>>As you know, I am majoring in Tourism Management and I don't know how smart grid works. But you know what's interesting?
in the future, many company will come to jeju to hold a convention or exhibition about smart grid, and they need person who is in the know about smart grid.
>>In the near future, when a lot of companies will be coming to Jeju for conventions or exhibitions about smart grid, they will be needing (manpower/people) who are knowledgeable on smart grid.
moreover, many employee will come to jeju. and they need a tour program.
>>Moreover, many employees will be coming to Jeju and a tour program will be needed.
so my friend and i am making a teambuilding program about that.
>>So my friend and I are organizing a team building program for that.
it's too hard for us because we lack of professional knowledge . but we like to prepare it .
>>It's hard for us to work for this because we lack professional knowledge. We insist to try and prepare for it though.
have a nice night!
>>Have a nice night!
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