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2011-04-11 · 첨삭 강사 Ella

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This my OPIC writing please corret that I want to travel France with my family My friend told me travel story in France She said that there were many beautiful scenery, good Frech food Theirs own unique culthure so i am more interested in France Than before Specally i want to visit Paris and see Eiffel Tower for myself --- I always carry camera that take wonderful scenery and people And pack essential supplies that are toiltries, guied book and Pajamas i like to travel light So just pack a small suitcase

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Hi [이름]!

I can see that you really did great in your composition today. I just have few reminders. I want you to always check your spellings and also the way you use the articles in your sentences. Also learn how to use punctuation marks when you write a sentence dear. Anyway, good job dear. Take care always.

T. Kristel

This my OPIC writing please corret that 

>>This is my OPIC writing composition; please do correct it for me.
I want to travel France with my family 

>>I want to travel to France with my family.
My friend told me travel story in France 

>>My friend told me a story when she travelled to France.
She said that there were many beautiful scenery, good Frech food

>>She said that there were many beautiful scenery and also delicious French dishes.
Theirs own unique culthure so i am more interested in France
Than before

>>They have a very unique culture that뭩 the reason why I am so interested to France more that before. 
Specally i want to visit Paris and see Eiffel Tower for myself

>>I also want to visit Paris and see the Eiffel Tower especially for myself.
I always carry camera that take wonderful scenery and people

>>I always carry camera뭩 that would take wonderful scenery and also people.
And pack essential supplies that are toiltries, guied book and 
Pajamas

>>I also pack essential supplies like toiletries, guided book and of course my pajamas.

i like to travel light

>>Correct.

>>I like to travel light.

So just pack a small suitcase

>>So I normally just pack small suitcases.

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