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When I started my first job, I had realised that English speaking skill is very important at work.
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So, I determined to leave for UK to improve my English skill.
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But, the life in London was not easy.
>> But life in London was not easy.
Even I had felt that I wanted to give up staying. Because I had hard time getting familiar with the different culture and life style.
>> I had even felt like giving up on staying because I had a hard time getting familiar with the different culture and lifestyle.
However, I changed my mind, because I knew that If I beat this time, I should grow up more and more when I look back myself in future.
>> However, I changed my mind, because I knew that if I beat this time, I would grow up more in the future when I look back at myself.
At the result, I could get along with good foreign friends.
>> As a result, I could get along with good foreign friends.
From time to time, I earned some money through part time job and I was able to look around the Europe.
>> From time to time, I earned some money through a part time job, and I was able to look around Europe.
In the travel, I could have more confidence to give a challenge something new.
>> I gained more confidence by traveling.
Even I experienced various of culture ㅛand get wide knowledge .
>> I even experienced various culture and acquired more knowledge.
One of my strong point is thoroughness.
>> One of my strong points is thoroughness.
To avoid a mistake, I have a habit which is, I always check what I am doing before.
>> To avoid making a mistake, I have a habit of checking what I have to do.
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