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Hello Soo!!!
That was fast!!!
Facebook is really a very popular social media, there are instances wherein people leave their accounts all day so that they will see feeds immediately.
I seldom open my account I often check it for new updates from people I know and then I log out immediately.
I am glad that you can express your opinion about almost anything.
Anyways, the corrections are below for you to see.
Till next time.
Teacher Roxy
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I will talk about skill grown of facebook.
Facebook has introduced a feature that allows users to prioritize what they see on their news feed.
>> Facebook has introduced a feature that allows users to prioritize what they see in their news feeds
Actually I really don\'t like to update my feeling or situaion on facebook. Becuase I don\'t want to focuse on how many i got \"likes\" or \"comments\" during all the day.
>> I really do not like to update my feeling or situation on Facebook because I don\'t want to focus on how many \"likes\" or comments I got for the whole day.
It interrupts to be consentrated on my daily life. So I only use the facebook whenever I am bored or I don\'t have anything to spend my time as seeing funny small video or friends\'s news feed only which I want to see.
>> It interrupts my concentration so I only use it whenever I am bored or I don\'t have anything to do. I only watch funny videos and read my friend\'s news feed.
Often, friends on facebook is not my best friends. So sometimes I wouln\'t like to see their news feed.
>> Some of my friends in Facebook are really not my best friends so I don\'t want to see their feeds.
If the feature that allows us to prioritize what we see on our news feed. Especially It is very helpful to see what i want to see and to skip what I don\'t want to see.
>> This feature is really helpful because it allows you to screen news feeds you don\'t want to see.
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