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2011-04-18 · 첨삭 강사 Ella

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Q1: Do you have any ambitions for the future? Yes, I do. I have ambitions for my future. I want to be a cabin crew as a best. Even if I become a flight attendant I'll do my best at work. Also I'm going to travel over the world as a best cabin crew. So I eager to be a cabin crew for my ambitions. Q2: Please tell me what you think a job is. Q3: Do you have any special skills? Yes, I do. I can do yoga very well. I have dancing and yoga such as strength for 5years eventhough I don't have license I can teach very well. When I have been Philippines I taught yoga to stedents. At that time I was famous yoga teacher in my school. For me yoga is not only saecial skill and also favorit hobby.

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Hello [이름]!

I had a great time reading your composition. Your sentences were very good. However, please check on your spelling as well as correct spacing. Thank you! Have a great day ahead!

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Q1: Do you have any ambitions for the future?
Yes, I do.

Correct
I have ambitions for my future.

Correct
I want to be a cabin crew as a best.

>> I want to work as the best crew in a cabin.

Even if I become a flight attendant I'll do my best at work.

>> Even if I become a flight attendant, I'll do my best at work.

Also I'm going to travel over the world as a best cabin crew.

Correct
So I eager to be a cabin crew for my ambitions.
>> I am so eager of becoming a cabin crew.

Q2: Please tell me what you think a job is.
No answer.
Q3: Do you have any special skills?
Yes, I do.

Correct
I can do yoga very well.

Correct
I have dancing and yoga such as strength for 5years eventhough I don't have license I can teach very well.

>> I am teaching dancing and yoga for five years. Even though I don't have license, I can teach very well.

When I have been Philippines I taught yoga to stedents.

>> I taught yoga when I’ve been to Philippines.
At that time I was famous yoga teacher in my school.

>> At that time, I was famous as yoga teacher in my school.
For me yoga is not only saecial skill and also favorit hobby.

>> For me yoga is not only special skill but also a hobby.

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