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Q1: In my case I excited and motivate when I am given good word by parents or my friends. Everybody likes getting compliments and nither I.Praise stimulates to me work hard and I try to do more best.
Q2: I think your company should hire me, I'm type of a person who is one of the most passionate people. That mean is I could devote my whole life to work as a best worker crew. moreover, I have doing yoga and meditation for a long time because I would enjoy not only work but good health as a best cabin crew. As a yoga trainer, I would say yoga is good for the body and mind so I'm sure that I can give to my passengers which is mental health services.
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Q1: In my case I excited and motivate when I am given good word by parents or my friends.
>> In my case, I get excited and motivated when I receive praises from parents or my friends.
Everybody likes getting compliments and nither I.
>> Everybody likes getting compliments and so do I.
Praise stimulates to me work hard and I try to do more best.
>> Praise stimulates me to work hard and I try to do more.Q2: I think your company should hire me, I'm type of a person who is one of the most passionate people.
>> I think your company should hire me, I am the type of person who is very passionate about people.
That mean is I could devote my whole life to work as a best worker crew.
>> This means that I am able to devote my whole life to my job as the best crew member.
moreover, I have doing yoga and meditation for a long time because I would enjoy not only work but good health as a best cabin crew.
>> Moreover, I have been doing yoga and meditation for a long time because I would like not only to enjoy my work as a cabin crew member in the future but also acquire good health.
As a yoga trainer, I would say yoga is good for the body and mind so I'm sure that I can give to my passengers which is mental health services.
>> As a yoga trainer, I would say yoga is good for the body and mind. With this, I am sure that I can also provide information about good mental health practices.
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