Hello!!!

2019-07-05 · 첨삭 강사 Sharon

학생이 쓴 원문

I always try to use good language. because Jesus resides in my heart. After meeting Jesus, I found a reason to live. It's not about making a lot of money, it's not about having power. I just want to live a life that makes Jesus happy. And I want to live by passing on Jesus, whom I believe, to others. The last thing I want to say to you, let's trust Jesus together! And together, let's go to the heaven! Jesus answered, "I am the way and the truth and the life. No one comes to the Father except through me.(John 14:6) A-men!

강사 첨삭

Hi Willy!

Great job on this part.

Take note of the changes below.

If you have questions, you can ask me later.

Let\'s practice the speech when you\'re ready.^^

~~ Teacher Sharon
I always try to use good language. because Jesus resides in my heart.

>> I always try to speak with thoughtfulness, honesty and kindness because Jesus resides in my heart.
After meeting Jesus, I found a reason to live.

>> Correct
It\'s not about making a lot of money, it\'s not about having power.

>> It\'s not about making a lot of money and it\'s not about having power.
I just want to live a life that makes Jesus happy.

>> Correct
And I want to live by passing on Jesus, whom I believe, to others.

>> I want to spend my life spreading the word about the life of Jesus, whom I really believe in.
The last thing I want to say to you, let\'s trust Jesus together!

>> Finally, I want to invite all of you to trust Jesus as I do.

And together, let\'s go to the heaven!

>> Together, someday, we can enter the gates of heaven.
Jesus answered, \"I am the way and the truth and the life.

>> Jesus said, \"I am the way, the truth and the life.

No one comes to the Father except through me. (John 14:6) A-men!

>> Correct

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