Hello Glenda!

2013-07-25 · 첨삭 강사 Glenda

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Good evening~ Just one more day, finally we will have a nice weekend again wow ho~! I think this weeks are especially hard for me. Not to mention TOEFL, I was concerned a lot because of my registeration. I hope that everthing will go smoothly. Anyway see you tomorrow~ bye~ Here is my homework. I disagree with this statement. Sometimes I discuss about this topic with my friends at the bar while drinking beer. Evertime we are almost unanimously agree that if we have a lot of money, we will be happy!. Let's just think about positive way. If we maintain our life just saving a lot of money? We don't have to worry about financial problem! We can enjoy delicious food every time and enjoy our lesiure time doing something we wanted to do with out any financial probelm. But we should do our work hard. I will be fantastic. So if I get a lot of money, I will save all of them and stay my life.

강사 첨삭

Hello there!!! ^^ I appreciate you doing a great job! That was an amazing composition. I hope you\'ll keep up the great job! Have a great evening ahead. I\'ll talk to you tomorrow. Teacher Glenda ^_^   Good evening~ >> CORRECT! Just one more day, finally we will have a nice weekend again wow ho~!>> CORRECT! I think this weeks are especially hard for me. >> I think this week is really hard for me. Not to mention TOEFL, I was concerned a lot because of my registeration. >> CORRECT! I hope that everthing will go smoothly. >> CORRECT! [But be careful with some typographical errors, \"everything\".] Anyway see you tomorrow~ bye~>> CORRECT!Here is my homework.>> CORRECT!I disagree with this statement. >> CORRECT! Sometimes I discuss about this topic with my friends at the bar while drinking beer. >> Sometimes I discuss this topic with my friends at the bar while drinking beer. Evertime we are almost unanimously agree that if we have a lot of money, we will be happy!. >> We almost unanimously agree that if we have much money we will be happy. Let\'s just think about positive way. >> Let\'s just think in a positive way. If we maintain our life just saving a lot of money? >> CORRECT! We don\'t have to worry about financial problem! >> CORRECT! We can enjoy delicious food every time and enjoy our lesiure time doing something we wanted to do with out any financial probelm. >> CORRECT! But we should do our work hard. >> But we should work hard. I will be fantastic. >> CORRECT! So if I get a lot of money, I will save all of them and stay my life. >> So if I have a lot of money, I will save it and continue my life.

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