Hello Glenda!

2013-08-09 · 첨삭 강사 Jane

학생이 쓴 원문

Good afternoon! The weather is too hot ㅠㅠ I have been living with turning fan on all day long. I hope that fall is coming quickly. One of my friends introduce me some girl because I am always stunk in home due to test. So he want me to be refresh this weekend. I hope that I will have a great time with her. HAhaHA!! Anyway have a nice weekend. Here is my homework. The lecturer discusses benefit of megastore and argues that there are a lot of drawbacks of megastores. That contradicts the reading passage's claim that megasotres have several benefits over small stores. First, he argues that unfortunatly people spend more money in megastore that small sotre. Because some other products are more expensive than small stores. This cast doubts on the reading passage's claim that they offer cheaper products than smaller shops do. Second he claims that megasotre is not convenient, Because there is too crowed by attracting many people. And There is too huge to look for the items. People waste their time. This counters the reading passage's claim that they are very convenient. Last, he points out that it is harmful for local economy. Because megastore monopolize near store and distribute low paying job. People have no other option but to take them. And they try to avoid employing full time job and having labor union. This refutes the reading passage's claim that megastores provide benefits for the local economy.

강사 첨삭

Hello there! 
Happy Friday! ^^

Well, I wish you are going to enjoy your time with your date tomorrow. kkkk 

Just have fun and don\'t worry too much about your test. 

I\'ll see you on Monday and tell me about your date. 

Okay? hahaha. 

See you

Take care! ^^

T. Glenda^^

Good afternoon!

>> CORRECT

The weather is too hot ㅠㅠ

>> CORRECT

I have been living with turning fan on all day long. 

>> I have been turning on the fan all day long. 

I hope that fall is coming quickly.

>> I hope that fall will come quickly. 

One of my friends introduce me some girl because I am always stunk in home due to test.

>> One of my friends introduces a girl to me because I\'m always stuck at home because of the test. 

So he want me to be refresh this weekend.

>>  So he wants me to be refreshed this weekend.

I hope that I will have a great time with her. HAhaHA!!

>> CORRECT

Anyway have a nice weekend.
>> CORRECT
Here is my homework.
>> CORRECT

The lecturer discusses benefit of megastore and argues that there are a lot of drawbacks of megastores.

>> The lecturer discusses the benefits of mega stores and argues that there are a lot of drawbacks of it. 

That contradicts the reading passage\'s claim that megasotres have several benefits over small stores. 

>> CORRECT

First, he argues that unfortunatly people spend more money in megastore that small sotre.

>> CORRECT (*spelling-unfortunately, mega stores, store)

Because some other products are more expensive than small stores.

>> CORRECT

This cast doubts on the reading passage\'s claim that they offer cheaper products than smaller shops do.

>> CORRECT

Second he claims that megasotre is not convenient, Because there is too crowed by attracting many people.

>> Second, he claims that mega store is not convenient because it is too crowded there as it attracts many people. 

And There is too huge to look for the items.

>> And it is too huge there to look/find some items. 

People waste their time.

>> CORRECT

This counters the reading passage\'s claim that they are very convenient.

>> CORRECT

Last, he points out that it is harmful for local economy.

>> And the last one points out that it is harmful for local economy. 

Because megastore monopolize near store and distribute low paying job.

>> Because mega stores monopolizes near stores and distributes low paying job. 

People have no other option but to take them.

>> CORRECT

And they try to avoid employing full time job and having labor union.

>> CORRECT

This refutes the reading passage\'s claim that megastores provide benefits for the local economy.

>> CORRECT

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