Hello Glenda! (Sorry I don't have empty blank to write ^^;;)
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I agree with the following statement. There is an reasons support my opinion.
I think they can't have enough time to have a right decision. So they tend to just follow their instinct.
I have an personal example. Two weeks ago, I needed some lab top computer to use my first semester. So I had agonize where I purchase my computer. I knew that searching in the internet is more accurate and that I can get a lot of information and compare with a lot of model's ability. But at that time I just wanted to buy computer and use fast as I can. So I just went to the electric shop near my home. And I purchased the item that seemed looking good. However after one week later I bought that lab top, my lab top was suddenly out of order. I thought it is too weird. Because the time just go one week after I bought computer. So I called to my friends who know well about computer and ask him to fix my computer. After he treated my computer and told me that the computer sold in the big store usually have some bad components. He mentioned that I should have asked a question to him before buying computer and I should make my decision carefully. Although I really regretted, but time had already gone. So I made my mind every time I made a decision I must think carefully. Following this example, people usually make their decision quickly because it is too annoying to think deeply. Thus they just follow their instinct. It usually lead them to wrong decision. (Sorry, too long ^^;;)
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Hello there!
I agree that before making a decision, we must think carefully. It\'s good that you\'ve already realized that.
Anyway, you did great for accomplishing your homework. Please continue to do so.
I hope that you\'ll enjoy the rest of your day!
See you in our next class.
T. Glenda^^-
I agree with the following statement.
>> Correct
There is an reasons support my opinion. >> There is a reason that will support my opinion.
I think they can\'t have enough time to have a right decision.
>> I think, they don\'t have enough to make a right decision.
So they tend to just follow their instinct. >> That\'s why, they just tend to follow their instinct.
I have an personal example.
>> I have an example.
Two weeks ago, I needed some lab top computer to use my first semester.
>> Two weeks ago, I needed a laptap to use for my studies.
So I had agonize where I purchase my computer.
>> So I had an agony what model should I purchase.
I knew that searching in the internet is more accurate and that I can get a lot of information and compare with a lot of model\'s ability.
>> I knew that searching in the internet is more accurate and that I can get a lot of information about the specifications of different models that I can compare.
But at that time I just wanted to buy computer and use fast as I can.
>> However, that time I just wanted to buy a computer and use it as soon as possible.
So I just went to the electric shop near my home.
>> So, I went to the computer shop near my home.
And I purchased the item that seemed looking good.
>> I purchased the item which seemed to be good.
However after one week later I bought that lab top, my lab top was suddenly out of order.
>> However, after a week, my laptap suddenly went out-of-order.
I thought it is too weird.
>> I thought it was too weird.
Because the time just go one week after I bought computer.
>> It is because I just bought it recently.
So I called to my friends who know well about computer and ask him to fix my computer.
>> So, I called my friend who knows computers well and asked him to fix my computer.
After he treated my computer and told me that the computer sold in the big store usually have some bad components.
>> He fixed my computer and afterwards, he told me that the computers being sold at the shop have some bad components.
He mentioned that I should have asked a question to him before buying computer and I should make my decision carefully.
>> He mentioned that I should have asked him before I bought my computer and that I should have made a decision carefully.
Although I really regretted, but time had already gone.
>> Even if I really regret it, it was already done.
So I made my mind every time I made a decision I must think carefully.
>> From then on, I realized that I must think carefully before making a decision.
Following this example, people usually make their decision quickly because it is too annoying to think deeply.
>> Most people usually decide quickly because they think that thinking carefully is too annoying.
Thus they just follow their instinct.
>> Correct
It usually lead them to wrong decision. (Sorry, too long ^^;;)
>> However, their instinct usually lead them to wrong decisions. (Sorry, it\'s too long^^;;)
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