Hello Juliet!
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Nice to meet you again! Now I come back my normal life. Since every works is done, so I can focus on my work again.
Anyway it was great time studying with you again^^. See you tomorrow~
Here is my essay.
In my case, I agree with being religious person. I think it is very close between religiosity and ethics. There are some reasons to support my opinion.
First, since I am a christian, I will discuss on a point of view of a christian.
You can see many comments on the bible that are related with ethics. For examples, 'Don't be greedy', 'Don't lie','Be kind person','love each other with your neighbor' and so on. When it comes to religious people, normally they try to follow these kinds of comments. It naturally lead them to become moral people. So that's why I think it is very close between religiosity and ethics.
However,If one regularly goes to church and just seat on the chair and try to practice nothing then anything will be changed. Attending church regularly will not means being moral person. When they try to follow the right comments, they will be the people who are both religious and ethical.
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Hi there^^
Nice to meet you too
Thank you for doing your homework^^
You did great!! Keep it up^^
I made some corrections and I hope I was able to meet all your points.
See you tomorrow.
Have a great day and take care^^
~T.Juliet^^
Nice to meet you again!
>> CORRECT^^
Now I come back my normal life.
>> Now, I\'m back with my normal life.
Since every works is done, so I can focus on my work again.
>>Since every work is done, I can focus on my work again.
Anyway it was great time studying with you again^^.
>>Anyway, it was a great time studying with you again.^^
>> Anyway, it was great studying with you again.^^
See you tomorrow~>> CORRECT^^Here is my essay.>> CORRECT^^
In my case, I agree with being religious person.
>> In my case, I agree with being a religious person.
I think it is very close between religiosity and ethics.
>> Do you mean, \"I think religious and ethics have similarity.\"
There are some reasons to support my opinion.>> CORRECT^^
First, since I am a christian, I will discuss on a point of view of a christian.
>> First, since I\'m a christian, I will discuss things on a christian point of view .
You can see many comments on the bible that are related with ethics.
>> You can see many verses on the bible that are related to ethics.
For examples, \'Don\'t be greedy\', \'Don\'t lie\',\'Be kind person\',\'love each other with your neighbor\' and so on.
>> For example, \'Don\'t be greedy\', \'Don\'t lie\',\'Be kind person\',\'love each other with your neighbor\' and so on.
OR>>Some examples are: \'Don\'t be greedy\', \'Don\'t lie\',\'Be kind person\',\'love each other with your neighbor\' and so on.
When it comes to religious people, normally they try to follow these kinds of comments.
>> When it comes to religious people, normally they try to follow these verses.
It naturally lead them to become moral people.
>> It naturally leads them to become a moral person.
So that\'s why I think it is very close between religiosity and ethics.
>> So, that\'s why I think that religion and ethics are similar.
However,If one regularly goes to church and just seat on the chair and try to practice nothing then anything will be changed.
>>However, If a person regularly goes to church and sit on the chair and try to practice nothing then there would be no changes.
Attending church regularly will not means being moral person.
>> Going to church regularly doesn\'t mean that you are a moral person.
When they try to follow the right comments, they will be the people who are both religious and ethical.
>> When they try to follow what is right, they will be both religious and ethical.
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