Hello Lirah,
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It’s getting warmer. Well, I wanted to tell you more detailed story about yesterday’s event in the morning. But I couldn’t. That is my problem.
Anyway, as I told you, I went to see a regatta with my friend. It was the first time to watch really a regatta. I had more fun than I expected to, even if waiting time was long because there is a race every half hour.
I arrived in the Sakura-bridge of the Sumida-river at noon where a regatta took place in. But my friend had arrived in there much earlier for watching the whole game than me.
She said she really love water, boats, and birds. So, she wanted to go early there and to look around riverside.
We had some trouble to look for each other because it was too crowded. Eventually we joint and enjoyed a regatta together.
강사 첨삭
Dear [Name],
It's nice to hear about your regatta watching experience. I wish I can also see something like this. Although I can paint a really great picture of this event from your description. I can see the river, I can see the boats and I can also see that it was really crowded because there are lots of people who wanted to watch the boat race. I think Japan is a great place and it seems like you are having fun in there.
Tell me more about what's going on in there. See you soon. Have a wondewrful day ahead!
Sincerely Yours,T. Lirah
It’s getting warmer. >>CorrectWell, I wanted to tell you more detailed story about yesterday’s event in the morning. >>Well, I wanted to tell you a more detailed story about yesterday morning's event. But I couldn’t. That is my problem.>>But I couldn’t, that is my problem.Anyway, as I told you, I went to see a regatta with my friend. >>CorrectIt was the first time to watch really a regatta.>>It was my first time to really watch a regatta. I had more fun than I expected to, even if waiting time was long because there is a race every half hour. >>I had more fun than I expected to, even if the waiting time was long because the race interval was every half hour. I arrived in the Sakura-bridge of the Sumida-river at noon where a regatta took place in. >>I arrived in the Sakura-bridge of the Sumida-river at noon where the regatta took place.But my friend had arrived in there much earlier for watching the whole game than me.>>But my friend had arrived in there much earlier than me for her to watch the whole game.She said she really love water, boats, and birds. >>CorrectSo, she wanted to go early there and to look around riverside. >>So, she wanted to go there earlier to look around at the riverside. We had some trouble to look for each other because it was too crowded. >>CorrectEventually we joint and enjoyed a regatta together. >>Eventually we met and we enjoyed the regatta together.
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