Hello, Ms. [Name]!
학생이 쓴 원문
Hello, Ms. [Name]!
It is so silent in this office since I am alone here. Every coworkers without me are in BEXCO to help the exhibition. Also, I take a medicine to get over my cold. That's why I am terribly sleeping. I want to lie down on a sofa in a staff lounge. But I can't do that, I should stay my seat to answer the phone. When come the close of the office hour!
-Homework-
If you will have a great adventure, where would you like to go - a jungle, a desert, a small island, a city etc.?
Many insects, snake and dangerous animal are there in jungle, it is terrible to live with various insects and other dangerous things.
It is exterme wather in desert. It is very hot in the afternoon, and very cold in the night. And There is nothing, just sand is there. If I go there, I will get some disease like a flu.
I live in the city, so going a city is not a adventure.
Therfore, I will select a small island. I want to put up a shanty in seaside and take a rest for myself.
강사 첨삭
Hi there Ms. [Name] [이름]!
How are you feeling tonight?
Happy happy Friday!
I hope that this weekend will be good to you so you will be able to recover from your colds.
So take a good and enough rest.
And with regards to your composition, I appreciate the fact that you still gave an an introduction on why you don\'t want to go to the place mentioned then going on to the last part.
So good job.
I was actually smiling while I was reading your composition. ^^
Anyway, see you again on Monday! Have a great and safe weekend.
Take care!
Always,
Kathrine ^^
Hello, Ms. [Name]!
>> correct! It is so silent in this office since I am alone here.
>> correct!
>> or: It\'s so silent in the office since I just here all alone.
Every coworkers without me are in BEXCO to help the exhibition. >> Every co-workers went to help in the exhibition in BEXCO without me.
Also, I take a medicine to get over my cold.
>> I also took a medicine to get over my cold.
That\'s why I am terribly sleeping.>> That\'s why I am terribly sleepy.
I want to lie down on a sofa in a staff lounge.
>> I want to lie down on the sofa in the staff lounge.
But I can\'t do that, I should stay my seat to answer the phone.>> But I can\'t do that since I have to stay on my seat to answer the phone,
When come the close of the office hour!>> When it is the closing time for office hors.
-Homework-If you will have a great adventure, where would you like to go - a jungle, a desert, a small island, a city etc.?Many insects, snake and dangerous animal are there in jungle, it is terrible to live with various insects and other dangerous things.
>> It\'s terrible to live in the jungle because there are many insects, snakes and other danegrous animals are there.
It is exterme wather in desert.
>> The weather is extreme on the desert.
It is very hot in the afternoon, and very cold in the night.
>> correct!
And There is nothing, just sand is there.
>> And there is nothing you can see there but sand.
If I go there, I will get some disease like a flu.>> correct! I live in the city, so going a city is not a adventure.
>> I live/I am living in the city so going in the city is not an adventure. Therfore, I will select a small island.>> correct!
I want to put up a shanty in seaside and take a rest for myself.
>> I want to put up a shanty along the seaside/seashore and take a good rest for myself.
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