Hello my NEW teacher Dianne
학생이 쓴 원문
Good afternoon teacher!
Today i had really great time with you.
I think we talked alot during short time.
We talked about how to be healthy people,and my brother
Do you know that my brother and i fight everyday?
I really hate my brother(joy)
he doesn't listen to me.
It makes me angry and his behavior brings us into a fight
example. when i ask him to be quiet he doen't listen to me
or if he go to the market he doesn't buy anything for me
I always buy for him.
Then i get angry we fight
Do you have sibling?
I want to have older sister
we can share cloth, we can talk about boy
Anyway i really had great time with you
I am really exciting to talk with you on monday
Have a great holiday and see you on monday
LOVE YOU~!
강사 첨삭
Hi, there my dear [이름]!
It was really nice meeting you!
I had a great time with you as well.
You were very talkative but in a positive way. Well, I guess, expressive is the better term.
Yes, you were active and you shared a lot of your ideas.
Thank you for a great conversation earlier. ^^
Just be careful with some puntuations and capitalization for your compositon.
Oh no! You don\'t get along well with your brother...hmm. Maybe try to be more patient.
Don\'t get angry often, you are very pretty and I don\'t want you to look stressed or old because of your brother. kkk
Enjoy your long holiday! I\'ll see you again on Monday!
I love you! ^^
_Teacher Dianne
Good afternoon teacher!
>> Correct
>> Or: Good evening teacher!Today i had really great time with you.
>> I really had a great time with you today.I think we talked alot during short time.>> I think we talked a lot during a short time.
>> Or: I think we talked a lot for a short period of time.
We talked about how to be healthy people,and my brother
>> We talked about my brother and how to be healthy people.Do you know that my brother and i fight everyday?
>> Do you know that my brother and I fight every day?I really hate my brother(joy) he doesn\'t listen to me.
>> I really hate my brother (Joy) because he doesn\'t listen to me.It makes me angry and his behavior brings us into a fight example. when i ask him to be quiet he doen\'t listen to me or if he go to the market he doesn\'t buy anything for me I always buy for him.>> It makes me angry and his behavior brings us into a fight. For example, when I ask him to be quiet, he doen\'t listen to me or if he goes to the market he doesn\'t buy anything for me but I always buy something for him.Then i get angry we fight
>> Then I get angry and we fight.Do you have sibling?
>> Do you have any siblings?I want to have older sister we can share cloth, we can talk about boy.
>> I want to have an older sister because we can share clothes and talk about boys.Anyway i really had great time with you
>> Anyway, I really had a great time with you.I am really exciting to talk with you on monday
>> I am really excited to talk with you on Monday.Have a great holiday and see you on monday
>> Have a great holiday and see you on Monday!LOVE YOU~!
>> I love you! ^.^
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