hello pretty!

2011-05-23 · 첨삭 강사 Jasmin

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hi! long time no see. last week, i went to seoul to participate in travel agency fair. i learned lots of thing. and my body was so exhausted. yesterday, i came back to jeju at 8:00 pm. i was really tired because of hard schedule. but i had a report by tommorow. and i started that at that time. i don't know how can i control my schedule and my complicate mind. i always wonder that i can be a succesful person. have a nice night and we can meet tommorow!

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! Blissful Monday! I am very happy because you have a great time participating in travel agency fair. I really believe that you will be a successful person someday. Just keep doing the best in everything you do and later you will be rewarded with your effort. Teacher Joanna   hi! long time no see. >>> Hi! Long time no see.last week, i went to seoul to participate in travel agency fair. >>> Last week, I went to Seoul to participate in travel agency fair.i learned lots of thing. and my body was so exhausted. >>> I learned lots of things and my body was so exhausted.yesterday, i came back to jeju at 8:00 pm. >>> Yesterday, I came back to Jeju at 8:00 pm.i was really tired because of hard schedule. >>> I was really tired because of hard schedule.but i had a report by tommorow. and i started that at that time. >>> But I had a report by tomorrow and I will have to start that at that time.i don't know how can i control my schedule and my complicate mind. >>> I don't know how can I control my schedule and my complicate mind.i always wonder that i can be a succesful person. >>> I always wonder if I could be a successful person.have a nice night and we can meet tommorow! >>> Have a nice night so that we can meet tomorrow!

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