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in this chart, our sales performance is 136% in 1st half year against to business plan and in 2nd half year our sales performance is 136%
>> Did you mean: In this chart, it shows our sales performance versus the business plan for the first half of the year which is 136 %. Also in the second half of the year, we reached the sales performance of 136 %.
Compar to last year our sales increased 36% in 1st half year and 35% increased in 2nd half year
>> Compared to last year, our sales increased by 36 % in the first half of the year and 35 % in the second half of the year.
Overall our sales performance is 128% against business plan and 35% is increase compare to last year.
>> Overall, our sales performance is 128% and there was a 35% increase compared to last year.
Let\'s look at the sales volume performance by product group.
>> Correct.
This chart is about RA and Pre assy sales volume.
>> Correct.
This graph show you long term sales volume until 2017year
>>This graph shows the long term sales volume until year 2017.
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