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2014-10-12 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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Vitamin C pill is cheaper than same amount of oranges. So, When I don't have enough money to buy many oranges, I will choose Vitimin C pills. But, Oranges are better than pills in many aspects. I searched some reasons in internet. For now, I will write down reasons. Many fruits have their flesh, It is made of fiber. we consume fruits, because we want to get vitimins, but that is not all Fiber is also important factor of eating fruits. it is not digested in our body, but It give us a feeling full, so we don't eat too much. so It slows food absorbed on our body, which prevent us get many adult disease. Even a cancer is prevented with these fiber which is in fruits flesh When fiber is in our body it have a effect on some of germs in our stomach, It make our body haste excreation. there is saying that When you eat vegetable, make it squeeze. When you want to eat fruits, make sure eat flesh of fruits

강사 첨삭

Good afternoon!
How are you today?
I hope that you are having a great time. 
It is really important to eat fruits and vegetables.
They make us healthier and prevent unwanted diseases. 
Thank you for doing your essay about Vitamin C. HIhihi.
Teacher Nina

Vitamin C pill is cheaper than same amount of oranges.
>> Vitamin C pill is cheaper than the same amount of oranges.
So, When I don\'t have enough money to buy many oranges, I will choose Vitimin C pills.
>> Correct ( spelling check: vitamin ^^ )
But, Oranges are better than pills in many aspects.
>> Correct
I searched some reasons in internet. 
>> I searched some reasons on the internet.
>> OR: I searched about the advantages of it on the internet. 
For now, I will write down reasons.
>> For now, I will write down the good reasons/ advantages of it
Many fruits have their flesh, It is made of fiber.
>> Correct
we consume fruits, because we want to get vitimins, but that is not all
>> Correct ( spelling check: vitamin ^^ )
Fiber is also important factor of eating fruits.
>> Fiber is also important when eating fruits. 
>> OR: When we eat fruits, we also get fiber from it. 
it is not digested in our body, but It give us a feeling full, so we don\'t eat too much. 
>> It is not digested in our body but it gives us a feeling of satisfaction so, we don\'t have to eat a lot. 
so It slows food absorbed on our body, which prevent us get many adult disease.
>> So, it slows down the absorption of food in our body which will prevent us from getting different diseases. 
Even a cancer is prevented with these fiber which is in fruits flesh
>> Even Cancer can be prevented with these fruits with fiber. 
When fiber is in our body it have a effect on some of germs in our stomach, It make our body haste excreation.
>> Did you mean: When fiber is in our body, it has an effect on some bad bacteria in our stomach. It makes our body haste excretion. 

there is saying that When you eat vegetable, make it squeeze. 
>> There is a saying that goes \"When you eat vegetable, make it squeeze\". 
When you want to eat fruits, make sure eat flesh of fruits
>> When you want to eat fruits, make sure to eat the flesh too. 

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