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2016-07-29 · 첨삭 강사 Chloe

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Hello, teacher! Today i heard cicadas cries again they wake me up But like you said yesterday I will just think that their cries are music. Today i am going to introduce my family My family member is 4 There are Dad, Mom, younger brother and me First i will introduce my dad My dad is photographer and he is very good at taking photo But best of my dad, he take cares of me My mom is web designer she can do everything about the computer She is great mom to me also she is my math teacher she is good at math I have great parent but little tiny problem for my parent they nags a lot Actully, I'm sick and tired of my parent's endless nagging like " clean your room" ," studay alot" etc. But maybe that all nag is for me next I will introduce my younger brother he is 12 years old he is smart and good at sport But sometime he doesn't listen to me then i got angry and we fight he is great brother but my little hope for him is please listen to me i will stop here and see you in the class~

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Hello, [이름]! Thank you very much for introducing your family to me. I really appreciate it. I believe that you have a happy family. Indeed, you are lucky enough! Your parents want the best for you, so don\'t complain when they ask you to do something. Always be a good girl, okay? Have a wonderful weekend with your family, then. ~Teacher Chloe Hello, teacher! >>Correct!Today i heard cicadas cries again they wake me up >>Today, I heard the cries of cicadas again when I woke up. But like you said yesterday I will just think that their cries are music. >>Like what I have said yesterday, I will just think their cries are music. Today i am going to introduce my family >>Today, I am going to introduce to you my family. My family member is 4 >>We are four in our family. OR:>>We are four members in our family. There are Dad, Mom, younger brother and me >>My father, mother, younger brother and me. First i will introduce my dad >>First, I am going to introduce my dad. OR:>>First, I am going to introduce my father. My dad is photographer and he is very good at taking photo >>My dad is a photographer and he is very good at taking photos. OR:>>He is a photographer and he is very good at taking photos. OR: >>My father is a photographer and he is very good at taking photos. But best of my dad, he take cares of me >>The best about my dad is that he takes care of me. My mom is web designer she can do everything about the computer >>My mom is a web designer. She can do everything in the computer. OR:>>My mother is a web designer. She can do everything in the computer. She is great mom to me also she is my math teacher she is good at math >>She is a great mom. She teachers me Math because she is good at it. OR: >>She is a great mother. She teachers me Math because she is good at it. I have great parent >>I have great parents. but little tiny problem for my parent they nags a lot >>But, I have a little problem about the, they nag a lot. Actully, I\'m sick and tired of my parent\'s endless nagging >>Actaully, I\'m sick and tired of my parent\'s endless nagging. like \" clean your room\" ,\" studay alot\" etc. >>They would ask me to clean my room and study a lot. But maybe that all nag is for me >>But, maybe, all the nags are for my own good. next I will introduce my younger brother >>Next, I am going to introduce my younger brother. he is 12 years old he is smart and good at sport >>He is 12 years old. He is smart and good at sport. But sometime he doesn\'t listen to me then i got angry and we fight >>But, he doesn\'t sometimes listen to me. It makes me angry and his behavior brings us into a fight, too. he is great brother but my little hope for him is please listen to me >>He is a great brother. My little hope is that he would listen to me.  i will stop here and see you in the class~ >>I will stop from here and see you in the class. OR:>>I will stop from here and talk to you in the class.

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