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2016-08-03 · 첨삭 강사 Chloe

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Good afternoon, teacher Today i went to library to volunteer, I can still hear cicadas, but their cry is getting softer. anyway i want to ask you about something In korea we requires to volunteer for 15hour ~ 20hour Do you agree with it or oppose with it? In my opinion, i don't agree volunteer means we help other from the heart not an obligation If we volunteer compulsory We find easy job or we just do it because we have to fill the time So i am not agree with it Now i will tell you about my vacation This vacation was not very good I think all i did was study My parent's says vacation is chance to study more I know it but i want to go out and play with my friends I didn'mean that i want to play every day just sometime to clear my head There is no time for distractions I will stop here for today , and please tell me your opinion~

강사 첨삭

Hello, [이름]! Volunteering for 15 to 20 hours is just okay. Volunteering has a meaningful, positive impact on your community. To me, it is a good way to help the people who are in need.Through it, you can be a part of your community.  But did you know that it can have many benefits for you too? Volunteering is the perfect vehicle to discover something you are really good at and develop a new skill. As Mahatma Gandhi said, \"Live as if you were to die tomorrow.  Learn as if you were to live forever.\" I hope that I answered your question. ~Teacher Chloe Good afternoon, teacher >>Good afternoon, teacher. Today i went to library to volunteer, >>Today, I went to library to volunteer. I can still hear cicadas, but their cry is getting softer. >>I can still hear cicadas, but their cry is getting softer. anyway i want to ask you about something >>Anyway, I want to ask you about something. In korea we requires to volunteer for 15hour ~ 20hour >>In Korea we are required to volunteer for 15 to  20 hours.Do you agree with it or oppose with it? >>Do you agree or disagree? In my opinion, i don\'t agree >>To me, I disagree. volunteer means we help other from the heart not an obligation >>Volunteer means we help others whoheartedly, not an obligation. If we volunteer compulsory >>It is not a mandatory. We find easy job or we just do it because we have to fill the time >>We find it as an easy job. We just do it to kill the time. So i am not agree with it >>So, I don\'t agree with it. Now i will tell you about my vacation >>Now, I am going to tell you about my vacation.This vacation was not very good >>My vacation is not very good. I think all i did was study >>I think all I do is to study. My parent\'s says vacation is chance to study more >>My parents said that vacation is the chance to study harder. I know it but i want to go out and play with my friends >>I know it but I want to go out and play with my friends. I didn\'mean that i want to play every day just sometime to clear my head >>I didn\'t mean that I want to play all the time but some times to clear my head. There is no time for distractions >>There is no time for distractions. I will stop here for today , and please tell me your opinion~ >>I will stop here from today and please them me about your opinion.

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