hello! teacher

2016-08-05 · 첨삭 강사 Chloe

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Good evening, teacher! You like a movie named 'The Notebook'? I never heard of it , but it sound fun and mystery. Today i am going to tell you about my future plan. Every class i tell you that my parents always nags me alot But my parents want the best for me , so i won't complain when they nags me Now let's get down to our topic. i am 15 years old,so in 5years i will go to college I want to go police university it is hard to go there but i will do my best and go to police university I will learn French too,then i want to go France maybe i can travel all around the world! isn't it exciting plan? after, i will volunteer for poor children I want to help them right now, but i am too busy for that so when I have a stable job and family I can help them~ I will stop from here and i will talk to you again in our class later. have a wonderful day~ ps. Do you have future plan?

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Hello, [이름]! You should make your dreams come true. You are still young but learn how to pursue them. I believe that you can do it. You are a brilliant girl so, believe in yourself, too. One of my future plans is to enjoy life more. ~Teacher Chloe Good evening, teacher! >>Correct!You like a movie named \'The Notebook\'? >>Do you like the movie \"The Notebook?\".I never heard of it , but it sound fun and mystery. >>I never heard of it, but it sounds fun and mysterious. Today i am going to tell you about my future plan. >>Today, I am going to tell you about my future plan.Every class i tell you that my parents always nags me alot >>I always tell you in our class that my parents nag me a lot. But my parents want the best for me , so i won\'t complain when they nags me >>I know that they want the best for me so, I don\'t complain about it.  Now let\'s get down to our topic. >>Correct!i am 15 years old,so in 5years i will go to college >>I am 15 years old now. Five years later, I will go to college. I want to go police university it is hard to go there >>I want to go to the Police University. Although, it is hard to go there. but i will do my best and go to police university >>But, I will do my best to enter there. I will learn French too,then i want to go France >>I want to go to France so, I will learn French, too. maybe i can travel all around the world! >>Maybe, I will travel all around the world. isn\'t it exciting plan? >>Isn\'t it an exciting plan? after, i will volunteer for poor children >>I will also volunteer for the poor children. I want to help them right now, but i am too busy for that >>I want to help them right now, but I am too busy for it. so when I have a stable job and family I can help them~ >>So, when I have my own stable job and family, I would help them. I will stop from here and i will talk to you again in our class later. >>I will stop from here and I will talk to you again in our class later.have a wonderful day~>>Have a wonderful day! ps. Do you have future plan? >>Do you have a future plan?

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