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2016-08-08 · 첨삭 강사 Chloe

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Good morning, Teacher! it's very hot here now but,I think weather gets cooler I can't sleep with out air conditioner last week however, i can sleep with out air conditioner last night anyway, did you watched rio olympic opening ceremony? Their was alot happened During the olympic opening ceremony, flame blow out for 3time also, when player arrived Brazil airport, player had to face the banner It says' wellcome to the hell' If I were member of team, i don't want to participate the olympic and That's not all The most scary and dangerous thing is Zika virus It will be too dangerous for everyone I just hope they can back to korea with out accident but why brazilian blow out the flame for 3time? and oppose the olympic? I heard because the gap between rich and poor are getting deeper in Brazil. so poor people or homeless person are oppose the olympics I was angry about them but i can understand them why they demonstration, oppose the olympic i will stop from here

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Hello, [이름]! It is surprising that you watched the Rio Olympics. You are really interested in current events. Keep it up dear. As for me, I was not able to watch it. I will still try to look for some replay videos. Anyway, I encourage you to give a feedback or comments below my video profile  on our homepage. You may comment about our class and about me.  Thank you very much. ~Teacher Choe Good morning, Teacher! >>Good morning, teacher! it\'s very hot here now but,I think weather gets cooler >>It is still very hot in our place these days, but I think it is getting cool a little.I can\'t sleep with out air conditioner last week >>Last week, I couldn\'t sleep without an air conditioner. however, i can sleep with out air conditioner last night\\ >>Last night, I was able to sleep without an air conditioner. anyway, did you watched rio olympic opening ceremony? >>Anyway, did you watch the Rio Olympic Opening Ceremony? Their was alot happened >>There was a lot of happenings. During the olympic opening ceremony, flame blow out for 3time >>During the Olympic Opening Ceremony, flame was blown out for three times.also, when player arrived Brazil airport, player had to face the banner It says\' wellcome to the hell\' >>Also, when the players arrived in Brazil airport, they had to face the banner that says \"Welcome to hell\". If I were member of team, i don\'t want to participate the olympic>>If I were a member of a team, I would not participate anymore. and That\'s not all >>That\'s not all. The most scary and dangerous thing is Zika virus >>The most scarey and dangerous disease is the Zika virus. It will be too dangerous for everyone >>It is too dangerous for everyone. I just hope they can back to korea with out accident >>I hope that Korean players will come back to our country without any problem. but why brazilian blow out the flame for 3time? and oppose the olympic? >>But, why the Brazilian firestarter had blown out the fire for three times? I heard because the gap between rich and poor are getting deeper in Brazil. >>I heard that the gap between rich and poor is getting deeper in Brazil. so poor people or homeless person are oppose the olympics >>So, homeless people opposed the Olympics. I was angry about them >>I was angry with them. but i can understand them why they demonstration, oppose the olympic >>But, I understand what they did. i will stop from here >>I will stop from here.

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