hello teacher~!

2016-08-26 · 첨삭 강사 Chloe

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Good afternoon teacher! Today it's raining cats and dogs I think weathers is getting cooler I can feel the cool wind After our class I will go to my grandparent's house Because it's ancestral rites (in korea we say jesa) It's a ceremony held every year to mark the day of someone's passing Actully today is my great grandfather's ancestral rites I never saw him Because he passed away before i got born I think my grand mother really misses him He is her father Now my mom and aunt is cooking for the amcestral rites They are cooking Jeon(korea food), fish etc. I think this ceremony is kind of tradition in korea Do you think they really come from the sky? and eat what we made? I don't know the answer But some of my friend said when day was having ancestral rites Some smoke came in to the house and stay on the table I really surprised about that Maybe i can see my great grandfather today Now i will stop from here~ see you in our class PS.do you belive they really come?

강사 첨삭

Hello, [이름]! I am sure that you are having a good time right now. You must be eating a lot of delicious food. Anyway, I am not sure about it. Whether I believe it or not, I respect your friends\' beliefs. I cannot really tell because I haven\'t experienced it. Enjoy the your weekend! Have a fabulous one, dear! ~Teacher Chloe Good afternoon teacher! >>Correct! Today it\'s raining cats and dogs >>Today, it\'s raining cats and dogs. I think weathers is getting cooler >>I think the wether is getting cool. I can feel the cool wind >>I can feel the cool wind. After our class I will go to my grandparent\'s house>>After our class, I will go to my grandparents\' house. Because it\'s ancestral rites (in korea we say jesa) >>I will go there because it is my great grandfather\'s death anniversary. It\'s a ceremony held every year to mark the day of someone\'s passing Because it\'s ancestral rites (in korea we say jesa) Actully today is my great grandfather\'s ancestral rites >>We do it every year to remember our late great grandfather. I never saw him >>I never saw him. Because he passed away before i got born>>He passed away before I was born. I think my grand mother really misses him >>I think my grandmother really misses him. He is her father >>He is her father. Now my mom and aunt is cooking for the amcestral rites >>My mom and aunt are cooking some food right now. OR: >>My mother and aunt are cooking some food right now. They are cooking Jeon(korea food), fish etc. >>They are cooking some Korean traditional food. I think this ceremony is kind of tradition in korea >>This ceremony is a tradition in our country. OR:>>It is a ceremony that is commonly practiced in our country. Do you think they really come from the sky? and eat what we made?>>Do you think they really come from sky, be with us and eat what we have prepared? I don\'t know the answer >>I don\'t know the answer. But some of my friend said when day was having ancestral rites Some smoke came in to the house and stay on the table >>Some of my friends told me that while they are having the ancestral rite, smoke went into their houses and stayed on their tables. I really surprised about that >>I was really surprised about it. Maybe i can see my great grandfather today>>Maybe, I will see my great grandfather today. Now i will stop from here~ see you in our class >>I will stop from here. See you in our class. PS.do you belive they really come? >>Do you believe that they are really with us when we do the ancestral rite? 

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