hello teacher!!

2017-01-23 · 첨삭 강사 Chloe

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Today I'll tell you about my dream I want to be a dentist,police,judge. but I really want to be a dentist because I can help people. I want to help a many people. And I want to be a police officer too because It is awesome and cool. And why I want to be a judge because a judge is awesome too and judge is smart.

강사 첨삭

Hello, [이름]!

Life changes and so will your goals and ambitions.

Just be consistent with them.

Always think positively.

Someday, you\'ll be the person who you would want to become.

~ Teacher Chloe

Today I\'ll tell you about my dream

>>Today, I am going to tell you about my dream.
I want to be a dentist,police,judge.

>>I want to be a dentist, police or a judge.
but I really want to be a dentist because I can help people.

>>But, I really want to be a dentist because I want to help people.
I want to help a many people.

>>I want to help many people.
And I want to be a police officer too because It is awesome and cool.

>>I would also want to be a police officer because it is awesome and cool. 
And why I want to be a judge because a judge is awesome too and judge is smart.

>>The reason why I want to be a judge it that because it sounds awesome and smart.

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