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2017-01-23 · 첨삭 강사 Chloe

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Today is the coldest day in the winter. Last night it snow a lot and I was very happy. So I play with the snow this morning It was fun but It was very cold too. I just play with snow for 3 minute I want to play more but I think I play more I will have a cold. The snow will melt soon and I'm sad. But if the snow is continueing then the snow will not melt.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!

Don\'t be sad about it.

Just welcome the next season.

I am glad that you were able to play in the snow for a while.

Yes, you are right.

Don\'t stay longer outside because you might catch a cold.

Anyway, en[이름] the rest of the winter season.

~Teacher Chloe

Today is the coldest day in the winter. 

>>Today is the coldest day in the winter season.                                               
Last night it snow a lot and I was very happy. 

>>Last night, it snowed a lot and I was very happy.                                        
So I play with the snow this morning It was fun but It was very cold too. 

>>So, I played in the snow this morning. I had fun but it was very cold.             
I just play with snow for 3 minute I want to play more but I think I play more I will have a cold.

>>I just played in the snow for three minutes. I wanted to play longer but I might catch a cold.

The snow will melt soon and I\'m sad.

>>The snow is going to melt soon and it makes me sad.
But if the snow is continueing then the snow will not melt.

>>But, if it will continue to snow, it wont.  

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