Hello teacher~!

2017-01-25 · 첨삭 강사 camille

학생이 쓴 원문

Good afternoon, teacher After i write this composition i will play bawling with my family Bawling is becoming popular in korea now Anyway we talked about the happiness. I said there are many things makes me happy~! But most important thing that makes me happy is my family~!!! If i don't have a family I will really loney and depressed Teacher what is the most important thing that makes you happy? Family or your dog I want to see your dog!!! Also you asked me about childhood When i was young, i was happy everyday My parents always played with me We go to the zoo, amusement park,beach, swimming pool etc... Oh my!! I want to go back I want to be younger!! I have to go now Thank you for teaching me Have a nice day~! PS. promise me to show your dog okay???

강사 첨삭

Hi baby! Good evening!
Thank you so much for the very fun and active class we had today.

I always appreciate your time with me baby thank you.

Sure thing I will show you all pictures of my dog kkk...

I can\'t wait!

The most important thing is my family. They always make me happy. And yes, my dog

is already a part of my family... So I love them both big time!!

Take care always and have a good night...

I love you!

xoxoTeacher Cam^^

Good afternoon, teacher

>>correct
 After i write this composition i will play bawling with my family

>>correct (Observe the proper spelling of the word BOWLING)
 Bawling is becoming popular in korea now

>>correct (Observe the proper spelling of the word BOWLING)
 Anyway we talked about the happiness.

>>Anyway today we talked about Happiness.
 I said there are many things makes me happy~!

>>I said there are many things that make me happy.
 But most important thing that makes me happy is my family~!!!

>>But the most important thing that makes me happy is my family.
 If i don\'t have a family 

>>correct
 I will really loney and depressed

>>I will be really lonely and depressed.
 Teacher what is the most important thing that makes you happy?

>>correct
 Family or your dog

>>correct
 I want to see your dog!!!

>>correct
 Also you asked me about childhood

>>correct
 When i was young, i was happy everyday

>>correct
 My parents always played with me

>>correct
 We go to the zoo, amusement park,beach, swimming pool etc...

>>correct
 Oh my!! I want to go back

>>correct
 I want to be younger!!

>>correct
 I have to go now

>>correct
 Thank you for teaching me 

>>correct
 Have a nice day~!

>>correct
 PS. promise me to show your dog okay???

>>correct

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