Hello, teacher~!

2017-03-07 · 첨삭 강사 camille

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Hello, teacher~! Long time no see~! ,I missed you so much I was really busy:( I did my homework, aslo i have to get ready for my school I am really tired;; Any way i will tell you about my weekend story I went to the capital of korea . i think you will know seoul And i was really busy on that day too I only slept for 3hours i havet to wake up at 4 When we go to seoul we took a bus. I ate delicious food their and next we went to amusement park "lotte world" I never been to lotte world before but i went to the everland At their i rode scary things I love scary things it makes me happy But unfortunately my brother doesn't like to ride a scary things So i have to ride alone At night i watched a Parade It was colorful and beautiful I think i like lotte world because lotte world is in the buliding so we can enjoy it every season And when we come back to our country we rode a KTX it was really fast now i have to eat some snack see you on the class~!

강사 첨삭

Hi baby! I missed you so so soooooooooo much!

I am so glad you are back!

Welcome back baby!

I can\'t wait to hear your voice again...

I love love love you!

xoxoTeacher Cam^^

Hello, teacher~!

>>correct
 Long time no see~! ,I missed you so much

>>correct
 I was really busy:(

>>correct
 I did my homework, aslo i have to get ready for my school

>>correct
 I am really tired;;

>>correct
 Any way i will tell you about my weekend story

>>correct
 I went to the capital of korea . i think you will know seoul

>>correct
 And i was really busy on that day too

>>correct
 I only slept for 3hours i havet to wake up at 4

>>correct
 When we go to seoul we took a bus.

>>We took the bus to Seoul.
 I ate delicious food their

>>I ate many delicious food there.
 and next we went to amusement park \"lotte world\"

>>And next we went to the amusement park named Lotte world.
 I never been to lotte world before

>>correct
 but i went to the everland

>>correct
 At their i rode scary things

>>correct
 I love scary things it makes me happy

>>correct
 But unfortunately my brother doesn\'t like to ride a scary things

>>But unfortunately my brother doesn\'t like scary rides.
 So i have to ride alone

>>So I had to take the rides by myself.
 At night i watched a Parade

>>correct
 It was colorful and beautiful

>>correct
 I think i like lotte world because lotte world is in the buliding

>>I think I prefer the Lotte World because it is an indoor amusement park.
 so we can enjoy it every season

>>correct
 And when we come back to our country

>>And when we went back to our place...
 we rode a KTX it was really fast

>>We rode the KTX and it was really fast.
 now i have to eat some snack

>>correct
 see you on the class~!

>>See you in class...


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