Hello teacher~!

2017-03-28 · 첨삭 강사 camille

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Hello teacher~! Today i want to tell you about the Ferry Sewol Now i am keep crying about this accident Because i saw a message between the parents and their sons and daughters I am so sorry to them i want a truth The message was like this time- 9:00 Son: dad i love you so much time- 9:07 Dad: oh sun i love you so much too have fun at the jeju island time- 9:26( when he(dad) noticed about sewol accident) son please call me back... time- 10:03 i love you so much son please tell me that you alive please.... I was really sad now i can't stop crying Another message Younger Sister: bring souvenir :) i am wating for them Older sister: okay:) wait for it!!! Older sister: I am sorry.. i think i can't bring you a present It's very sad I hope every one have a great time at the Kingdom of God I think i have to go now teacher.... See you on the class

강사 첨삭

Hi there baby! Good evening!
Thank you so much for doing a great job...

This made me really sad...I also cried...T.T

This is so tragic that I even want to spend more time with the people I love specially my family...

Thank you so much and well talk more about this later.

Take care and have a good night...

xoxoTeacher Cam^^

Hello teacher~!

>>correct
 Today i want to tell you about the Ferry Sewol

>>correct

OR: Today I want to tell you about the Sewol Ferry.
 Now i am keep crying about this accident

>>I am now crying because of the incident.
 Because i saw a message between the parents and their sons and daughters

>>correct
 I am so sorry to them i want a truth

>>I am so sorry for them and I want the truth.
 The message was like this

>>correct
 time- 9:00 Son: dad i love you so much 

>>correct
 time- 9:07 Dad: oh sun i love you so much too have fun at the jeju island

>>correct
 time- 9:26( when he(dad) noticed about sewol accident) son please call me back...

>>correct
 time- 10:03 i love you so much son please tell me that you alive please....

>>correct
 I was really sad now i can\'t stop crying

>>correct
 Another message

>>correct
 Younger Sister: bring souvenir :) i am wating for them

>>correct
 Older sister: okay:) wait for it!!!

>>correct
 Older sister: I am sorry.. i think i can bring you a present

>>correct
 It\'s very sad

>>correct
 I hope every one have a great time at the Kingdom of God

>>I hope everyone would have a great time at the Kingdom of God.
 I think i have to go now teacher....

>>correct
 See you on the class

>>correct

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