Hello teacher~

2017-05-17 · 첨삭 강사 camille

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Hello teacher~!!!. Today I will tell you about my hobby. My hobby Is sport I like playing sport and I am good at it. Why I get my hobby is when I was 7years old I feel something. And when I was 8years old I was so good at sports. So I got this hobby. My hobby Is make me healthy and more stronger. But my hobby make me sunburn and sometime It make me hurt.

강사 첨삭

Hi baby!

Thank you so much for doing a great job!

I think you are strong ;) You love sports and you\'re good at them!

Cant wait to hear your voice again!
Take care and have a good night!

xoxoTeacher Cam^^

Hello teacher~!!!.

>>correct
 Today I will tell you about my hobby.

>>correct
 My hobby Is sport I like playing sport and I am good at it.

>>correct

OR: My hobby is playing sports.
 Why I get my hobby is when I was 7years old I feel something.

>>I started with my hobby when I was 7 years old.
 And when I was 8years old I was so good at sports.

>>When I turned 8 years old I became really good at sports.
 So I got this hobby.

>>correct
 My hobby Is make me healthy and more stronger.

>>My hobby makes me healthier and stronger.
 But my hobby make me sunburn and sometime It make me hurt.

>>But my hobby makes me have sunburn and it\'s very painful.

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