hello teacher(about the north korea)

2016-09-02 · 첨삭 강사 Chloe

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Good afternoon, teacher. I am really hungry right now Because i didn't have some snacks today I will eat so much on dinner Any way ,today we talked about north korea In north korea it is hard to live Do you know that north korea disappear in every night? The north korea has no money to pay for the electronic So they have to turn off the light at night There is picture that there are no shining light in northkorea Also there are many seperated families When we had war in 2950, many people seperated It is really sad Actully like you said there is a campaign for reunion of dispersed family members But time is past, so many people can't find out there family members If i was in the same situation i will cry everyday I think i have to love my family right now I will stop from here have a nice day~ PS. Descendants of the Sun, was really great drama I was really surprised that you watched it I am so happy~!

강사 첨삭

Hello, [이름]! I knew that you were surprised. (Hahaha) Oh, I didn\'t know that. Thank you for sharing me that information. I really appreciate it. Although, it makes me sad. Indeed, the life in North Korea is unpleasant. We are lucky enough to be in good hands. So, we should be happy about it. Anyway, have a fabulous weekend! ~Teacher Chloe Good afternoon, teacher. >>Correct! I am really hungry right now Because i didn\'t have some snacks today >>I am really hungry right now because I didn\'t have some snacks today.I will eat so much on dinner >>I will eat a lot at dinner. Any way ,today we talked about north korea >>Anyway, we talked about North Korea today. In north korea it is hard to live >>It is hard to live in there. Do you know that north korea disappear in every night? >>Do you know that North Korea disappears every night? BETTER: >>Do you know that North Korea doesn\'t have any lights at night?The north korea has no money to pay for the electronic >>North Korea doesn\'t have money to pay for the electricity. So they have to turn off the light at night >>So, it has do turn off its lights at night. There is picture that there are no shining light in northkorea >>There are pictures showing that there are no lights there. Also there are many seperated families >>Also, there are many separated families.  When we had war in 2950, many people seperated >>They were separated during the war in 1950. It is really sad >>It is really sad. Actully like you said there is a campaign for reunion of dispersed family members >>You have mentioned that there was a campaign reunion for them. But time is past, so many people can\'t find out there family members>>Time had passed so many people couldn\'t find there family members. If i was in the same situation i will cry everyday >>If I were in the same situation as them, I will cry everyday.I think i have to love my family right now>>I think I will continue to love my family. I will stop from here have a nice day~ >>I will stop from here. Have a nice day.PS. Descendants of the Sun, was really great drama >>\"Descendants of the Sun\" is really a great drama. I was really surprised that you watched it >>I was really surprised when you told me that you have watched it. I am so happy~! >>I am so happy about it.

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