hello teacher~ (about weekend story)

2016-08-16 · 첨삭 강사 Chloe

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Good morning, teacher! Today ,I was really tired. It was really hard to wake up so I woke up at 10am why it's so hard to wake up? I was really busy to play on weekend I will tell you about my weekend story I visited my grandparent's house. Also my relative came too. We all gather around and had a great time. We ate delicious dinner, like barbecue, sausage, shrimp. It was like camping. We also watched a movie named 'The Jungle Book' Have you heard about this movie? Long story short One tiger hate the human because he lose his one eye because of the human. But wolf raised a human so the tiger want to eat him He ran away but he came back and kill the tiger I think the movie was really fantastic Also all animal was graphic just people was real During watching movie i thought animal is real Anyway back to the my weekend story All family watch TV together, sleep together I love my family I hope i can have a special time with my family again I will stop from here have a great day~

강사 첨삭

Hello, [이름]! I am so happy to hear from you that you had a great time. Indeed, your weekend was so wonderful. As for me, I enjoyed it, too. I was very happy. So, we should both stay happy. ~Teacher Chloe Good morning, teacher! >>Correct! Today ,I was really tired. >>Today, I am really tired. OR:>>I am really tired today. It was really hard to wake up so I woke up at 10am >>I woke up at 10AM because it was really hard to wake up early. why it\'s so hard to wake up? I was really busy to play on weekend >>Why is it hard to wake up? I was busy playing during the weekend. I will tell you about my weekend story >>I am going to tell you about my weekend. OR:>>I am going to tell you about it. I visited my grandparent\'s house. >>I visited my grandparents\' house. Also my relative came too. >>My relatives were there, too. We all gather around and had a great time. >>We all gathered and had a great time together. We ate delicious dinner, like barbecue, sausage, shrimp. >>We had delicious food for dinner such as barbecue, sausages, and shrimps. It was like camping. >>It was like a camping. We also watched a movie named \'The Jungle Book\' >>We also watched the movie \"The Jungle Book\". Have you heard about this movie? >>Correct! Long story short >>I am going to make the story of the movie short.  One tiger hate the human because he lose his one eye because of the human. >>A tiger hateed humans because he lose his one eye because of them.But wolf raised a human so the tiger want to eat him >>There was a man who raised a wolf but the tiger wants to eat him.He ran away but he came back and kill the tiger >>He ran away but he went back to kill the tiger. I think the movie was really fantastic >>I think that the movie is really fantastic. Also all animal was graphic just people was real >>The animals in the movie were graphics but humans were real. During watching movie i thought animal is real >>When I was watching the movie, I thought the animals were real. Anyway back to the my weekend story >>Abyway, back to my weekend story. All family watch TV together, sleep together >>My family and relatives watched TV and slept together.I love my family >>I love my family. I hope i can have a special time with my family again >>I hope we would have a special time again. I will stop from here have a great day~ >>I will stop from here. Have a great day!

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