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2018-09-20 · 첨삭 강사 Jean

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A: Korea venture investment is public venture company. you invest adventurously in start-up of diverse industry which in the condition that Korea has competitiveness of limited industry, is essentially needed. Recently you have invested in Korea's blockbuster movies, IT and entertainment company. various for decades, Your business walking have contributed to make Korea’s industry various for decades. I want to be your member and contribute to domestic finance growth.

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Jean

A: Korea venture investment is public venture company.
>> Korea Venture Investment is a public venture company.

you invest adventurously in start-up of diverse industry which in the condition that Korea has competitiveness of limited industry, is essentially needed.
>> This corporation is known as a risk taker as it invests in start-up companies in diverse industries which has a significant effect on the limited industry in Korea.

Recently you have invested in Korea\'s blockbuster movies, IT and entertainment company.
>> You have recently invested in Korea\'s blockbuster movies or in the entertainment industry and in IT.

various for decades, Your business walking have contributed to make Korea’s industry various for decades.
>> The way you\'ve been running your business for decades has contributed to the growth in Korea\'s industry. The industry is now more diverse.

I want to be your member and contribute to domestic finance growth.
>> This is one of my motivations in wanting to become a part of this growth and movement. I\'d be glad to contribute to the domestic finance growth.

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