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2016-02-11 · 첨삭 강사 Venus

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-HOMEWORK FOR TODAY: A vegetarian diet is as healthy as a diet containing meat. What is your opinion? -My answer: I agree that a vegetarian diet is as healthy as a diet containing meat. I learned biology in my high school. There are main nutritions each glucose, protein and fat for human beings. It's bioenergy source which can act for people. But we only need to 2 nutritions both glucose and protein. Absolutely, human beings need to mineral, vitamin etc as well. Anyway, vegetables have all of nutritions. In the other hand, there is no fat in vegetables. So, a vegetarian diet is good for controling weight to get more healthy body. Beans have a good protein and vitamin. I think that meat is very high energy source. In history of human, primitive man had to eat meat to survive against a strong wild animal. They had to store high energy in their body.

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Hello [이름]!   I like how you explained your opinion. Some reminders:   Teacher Venus^^   My answer: I agree that a vegetarian diet is as healthy as a diet containing meat. >>>CORRECT   I learned biology in my high school. >>>CORRECT   There are main nutritions each glucose, protein and fat for human beings. >>>The main nutritients human beings need are glucose, protein and fat.   It\'s bioenergy source which can act for people. >>>Vegetables are good sources of   But we only need to 2 nutritions both glucose and protein. >>>But we only need glucose and protein.   Absolutely, human beings need to mineral, vitamin etc as well. >>>Absolutely, human beings need minerals, vitamins, etc as well.   Anyway, vegetables have all of nutritions. >>>Anyway, vegetables have all nutrients.   In the other hand, there is no fat in vegetables. >>>On the other hand, there is no fat in vegetables.   So, a vegetarian diet is good for controling weight to get more healthy body. >>>So, a vegetarian diet is good for controling weight to get a healthier body.   Beans have a good protein and vitamin. >>>Beans have protein and vitamin.   I think that meat is very high energy source. >>>I think that meat is a very high-energy source.   In history of human, primitive man had to eat meat to survive against a strong wild animal. >>>In the history of human, primitive men had to eat meat to survive against a strong wild animal.   They had to store high energy in their body. >>>CORRECT

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