Hello Venus~

2016-02-26 · 첨삭 강사 Venus

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-Homework: Write about something ugly--war, fear, hate, or cruelty. I'll tell you about cruelty. Recently, I'm used to think about died animal by roadkill. They don't might know why they are died in road. That's really sad accident. But Absolutely, Human result in this situation. Because they have developed the car to move faster to somewhere, the animal is unfortunately dying in road. I think so. People that developed the car might know this cruelty. In order to benefits of human, they decided this choice. Although I told you about roadkill, there are many similar situation in common. I think that human must live together.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]!   You wrote good sentences.  Let\'s define roadkill. Roadkill- an animal (or animals, collectively) killed by a vehicle on a road   Teacher Venus^^   -Homework: Write about something ugly--war, fear, hate, or cruelty.I\'ll tell you about cruelty. >>>CORRECT   Recently, I\'m used to think about died animal by roadkill. >>>Recently, I\'m thinking about roadkills.   They don\'t might know why they are died in road. >>>They might not know why they died on a road.   That\'s really sad accident. >>>That\'s a really sad accident.   But Absolutely, Human result in this situation. >>>But absolutely, humans did this situation.   Because they have developed the car to move faster to somewhere, the animal is unfortunately dying in road. >>>Because they have developed the car that can move faster somewhere, the animal is unfortunately dying on the road.   I think so. >>>I think that\'s happening.   People that developed the car might know this cruelty. >>>People who developed the car might know this cruelty.   In order to benefits of human, they decided this choice. >>>In order for humans to gain benefits, they made this choice.   Although I told you about roadkill, there are many similar situation in common. >>>Although I told you about roadkills, there are many similar situations.   I think that human must live together. >>>I think that humans must live together with animals peacefully.  

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