Hello Verna,

2010-11-02 · 첨삭 강사 abby

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I really want to gain more confidence in speaking in English. Here are sentences that you assigned to me today. My sister is a serious body-conscious person. She always told me that I have to take more care of health. When I went back to Korea on summer vacation, she bought nutritional supplements for me. The figure of my weight had risen 4% recently. I really feel that I need to do diet. I went to the department store near home to indulge in shopping last weekend. But eventually I didn’t buy anything because nothing appealed to my fancy. On the other hand, I bought lots of food to recover my strength and I ate too much. I may gain weight if I don’t exercise. Verna, I don’t know the meaning of stationery bikes. So I cannot make a writing with stationery bikes.

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Hello there [이름],    I think gaining confidence is very important. You have to keep in mind that all people  commit mistakes when it comes to English even teachers. So, don't be afraid to speak even  you have slips. You don't have to be perfect to express your ideas. People around will understand. I believe in you! I have no doubt you are going to great in your English skills.     Anyway, stationary bikes are bicycles that are used in indoor exercising.  They are called stationary because they are not moving. Love,  Verna I really want to gain more confidence in speaking in English. >>CorrectHere are sentences that you assigned to me today.>>Correct >>Here are sentences that you assigned to me this morning.My sister is a serious body-conscious person. >>CorrectShe always told me that I have to take more care of health. >>She always told me that I have to take  care more of my health. When I went back to Korea on summer vacation, she bought nutritional supplements for me. >> CorrectThe figure of my weight had risen 4% recently.>>My weight had risen recently for about 4 %. >>My weight increased for 4 %. I really feel that I need to do diet. >> I really feel I need to have a diet.I went to the department store near home to indulge in shopping last weekend. >>I went to the department store near my home to indulge in shopping last weekend. But eventually I didn’t buy anything because nothing appealed to my fancy. >>Correct >> But eventually I didn’t buy anything because nothing seems to fancy me.. (better) On the other hand, I bought lots of food to recover my strength and I ate too much. >>CorrectI may gain weight if I don’t exercise.  >>I may gain weight if I won't exercise. Verna, I don’t know the meaning of stationery bikes. >>Verna, I don’t know the meaning of stationary bikes.So I cannot make a writing with stationery bikes.>> So I cannot make a sentence using stationary bike.

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