Hello Verna,

2010-11-12 · 첨삭 강사 Verna

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Time is too fast. We were talking about dream job in the class. Before the class, I tried to think out what was my dream job when I was young. I remembered I wrote A Great Teacher under future job on an individual investigation form. As I told you, it was not my real dream job. I thought that I should be because I heard A Teacher is the greatest job. It was not my thought but common one. I failed to remember what I really wanted to be. I’m not sure whether I had a dream job or not. I was an idealist and a realist. Still I am. I knew I could not be a scientist but I sometimes dreamed it. I didn’t want to live a normal life but I sometime wanted to be a superwoman that can do everything well. But nothing was clear what I really wanted to be. Still I don’t know. What is a dream job?

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]!      Thanks for your composition. I just want to tell you that you to be sure of what you want to be so that you will know how to achieve it. I believe in you! Happy weekend! Love, Verna Time is too fast. We were talking about dream job in the class. >>Correct Before the class, I tried to think out what was my dream job when I was young. >>Before the class,I tried to think about what my dream job was when I was young. I remembered I wrote A Great Teacher under future job on an individual investigation form. >>I remembered I wrote "A Great Teacher" under future job on an individual investigation form.  As I told you, it was not my real dream job. >>Correct >> As I told you it wasn't really my dream job.  I thought that I should be because I heard A Teacher is the greatest job. >> I thought that I should be a teacher because I heard it is the greatest job.  It was not my thought but common one. >> It was common but I haven't thought of it. I failed to remember what I really wanted to be. >>Correct I’m not sure whether I had a dream job or not. >>Correct  I was an idealist and a realist. >>Correct Still I am. >>Correct >> I am still.  I knew I could not be a scientist but I sometimes dreamed it. >> I knew I can't be a scientist  but I sometimes dream to be one. I didn’t want to live a normal life but I sometime wanted to be a superwoman that can do everything well. >> I didn't want to live a normal life but I sometimes want to be a superwoman that can do everything well.But nothing was clear what I really wanted to be. Still I don’t know. >>But nothing is clear, I don't know what I wanted to be. What is a dream job? >>Correct  

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