Hello Verna,
학생이 쓴 원문
Time is too fast. We were talking about dream job in the class. Before the class, I tried to think out what was my dream job when I was young. I remembered I wrote A Great Teacher under future job on an individual investigation form. As I told you, it was not my real dream job. I thought that I should be because I heard A Teacher is the greatest job. It was not my thought but common one. I failed to remember what I really wanted to be. I’m not sure whether I had a dream job or not. I was an idealist and a realist. Still I am. I knew I could not be a scientist but I sometimes dreamed it. I didn’t want to live a normal life but I sometime wanted to be a superwoman that can do everything well.
But nothing was clear what I really wanted to be. Still I don’t know. What is a dream job?
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]!
Thanks for your composition. I just want to tell you that you
to be sure of what you want to be so that you will know how to achieve it.
I believe in you! Happy weekend!
Love,
Verna
Time is too fast. We were talking about dream job in the class.
>>Correct
Before the class, I tried to think out what was my dream job when I was young.
>>Before the class,I tried to think about what my dream job was when I was young.
I remembered I wrote A Great Teacher under future job on an individual investigation form.
>>I remembered I wrote "A Great Teacher" under future job on an individual investigation form.
As I told you, it was not my real dream job.
>>Correct
>> As I told you it wasn't really my dream job.
I thought that I should be because I heard A Teacher is the greatest job.
>> I thought that I should be a teacher because I heard it is the greatest job.
It was not my thought but common one.
>> It was common but I haven't thought of it.
I failed to remember what I really wanted to be.
>>Correct
I’m not sure whether I had a dream job or not.
>>Correct
I was an idealist and a realist.
>>Correct
Still I am.
>>Correct
>> I am still.
I knew I could not be a scientist but I sometimes dreamed it.
>> I knew I can't be a scientist but I sometimes dream to be one.
I didn’t want to live a normal life but I sometime wanted to be a superwoman that can do everything well.
>> I didn't want to live a normal life but I sometimes want to be a superwoman that can do everything well.But nothing was clear what I really wanted to be. Still I don’t know.
>>But nothing is clear, I don't know what I wanted to be.
What is a dream job?
>>Correct
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