hello, Verna! I'm Kim.
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8.I am a good listener to my friends. So I have lots of experiences to help my friends. And I have volunteered to the disabled person and the poor person. When I was twenty years old, I had a experience to help the heart disease girl. She was only 6 years. And she was homeless. I made a mind to help the people who are very poor. It was my precious experiences.
9. I have bad memory because of my bad belief.It is that I am good at all exam. Two years ago, I failed an exam . So I was so dissapointed with me and I told a lie to my mother that I was pass the exam. But I regreted my attitude and I was so sorry to my mother. Then I learned from my mistake that I will never tell a lie.
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Hi there Kim,
Thank for being so diligent. I think you've learned one of the most
important thing in life and that is being honest. Anyway, good luck on your next exam.
-Verna-
8.I am a good listener to my friends.
>>Correct
So I have lots of experiences to help my friends.
>>So I have lots of experiences helping my friends.
And I have volunteered to the disabled person and the poor person.
>>And I had volunteered for disabled people and the poor people.
When I was twenty years old, I had a experience to help the heart disease girl.
>>When I was twenty years old, I had an experience helping a girl with heart disease.
She was only 6 years.
>> She was only six years old.
And she was homeless.
>>Correct
I made a mind to help the people who are very poor.
>> I made up my mind to help people who are very poor.
It was my precious experiences.
>> Those were my precious experiences.
9. I have bad memory because of my bad belief.
>> Correct
It is that I am good at all exam.
>> I believe I was good at all exams.
Two years ago, I failed an exam .
>>Correct
So I was so dissapointed with me and I told a lie to my mother that I was pass the exam.
>>So I was co disappointed with myself and I told my mother that I passed the exam.
But I regreted my attitude and I was so sorry to my mother.
>> But I regretted my attitude and I said sorry to my mother
Then I learned from my mistake that I will never tell a lie again.
>>Correct
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