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2018-01-19 · 첨삭 강사 Amanda

학생이 쓴 원문

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=4w9-KcVvIV8 youtube - 대한민국 영어말하기대회 전예슬 please, don't chage korean to english. if my sentence is wrong, correct the sentence. thanks a lot.

강사 첨삭


Hi Scarlett!

Thank you for trusting me to transcribe some parts of the speech.

I listened to the little girl\'s speech on YouTube and tried to understand as many words as I could but some of the words were not

pronounced or enunciated properly which made it quite difficult to understand, so I am not 100% sure about the accuracy of the transcript below.

We\'ll talk more about this tomorrow to make sure.

Good night!

Cheers,
Amanda ^-^



Your transcript:

hello everyone. my name is 박소연
I\'m first grade in 구봉 elementary school.
Today I\'d like to talk about Korean traditional costume which is called 한복.
Many countries has their own cool custums.
China has a 치빠오. Japan has a 기모노. and my country. korea has the 한복.
한복 is very beautiful and elegant. so I\'d respect korean cultural tradition.
The beautiful harmonium ________ hard line and stream lines makes 한복 special characteristic_________
The basic pattern of 한복 is 저고리 is an upperwear and 치마 is good for females.
On the other hand 바지 is trousers for males.
Those woman and man wear 두루마기 and overcoat 버선 and socks.
we can tell 한복 with 고름 is their buttons or zippers.
한복 is so surface between the close and the body.
so it can contribute to the body health ___________
however unfortunetly most koreans prefer ________ with the socks.
cloth ________ for ________ these days.
many people think 한복 is infractical and inconvience.
That\'s why reform 한복 _______한복 is made comfortable clothes.
_________ effect to the____________
How do I look?


Revised transcript:

Hello everyone! My name is 박소연
I\'m in first grade in 구봉 (Gubong) elementary school.
Today, I\'d like to talk about Korean traditional costume which is
called 한복 (Hanbok).
Many countries has their own cool costumes.
Scotland has a 치빠오, Japan has a 기모노 (kimono) and my country Korea
has the 한복 (Hanbok).
한복 (Hanbok) is very beautiful and elegant, so it represents Korean
culture and tradition.
The beautiful harmonium, curve lines and straight lines makes 한복
(Hanbok) specially characteristic.
The basic pattern of 한복 (Hanbok) is 저고리, is an upper wear and 치마
is a skirt for females.
On the other hand, 바지 is trousers for males.
Both women and men wear 두루마기  as an overcoat and 버선 as socks.
We can tie up 한복 (Hanbok) with 고름 is their furnace or zippers.
Hanbok is sufficient based between the clothes and the body, so it can contribute to the body health ventilation (I\'m not sure if

it\'s \"ventilation\"), unfortunately, most Koreans prefer western side clothes for daily wear these days.
Many people think that 한복 (Hanbok) is impractical and
inconvenient.
That\'s why before 한복 (hanbog) OR (I\'m not sure if it\'s \"or\"),
(Hanbok) 한복 is made for comfortable clothes.
Hanbok is our pride and cultural heritage, so we have to make an
effort to preserve it.
How do I look?

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