Heongseong
학생이 쓴 원문
Heongseong has a very large lake created by the construction of a dam. Along the lake, there are five walking trails, all of which have quiet and beautiful scenery. The city is also attracting many visitors with quality beef and buckwheat noodles. And it has two entrances for Chiaksan mountain and some small mountains. Each mountain has beautiful valleys or waterfalls, so many people visit to enjoy the cold water every summer.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Gi [이름]!
It really seems like your second house is located in a nice area with a very good view of nature. Just take note of minor corrections in your homework, like ‘two entrances to Chiaksan Mountain’ rather than ‘for.’ We use ‘to’ when we are talking about a place or where it leads, and ‘for’ for purpose or recipient, like ‘entrance for staff.’ Hope this helps.
- T. Caitlyn
Heongseong has a very large lake created by the construction of a dam.
>> CORRECT
Along the lake, there are five walking trails, all of which have quiet and beautiful scenery.
>> CORRECT
The city is also attracting many visitors with quality beef and buckwheat noodles.
>> CORRECT
And it has two entrances for Chiaksan mountain and some small mountains.
>> It also has two entrances to Chiaksan Mountain and some smaller mountains.
Each mountain has beautiful valleys or waterfalls, so many people visit to enjoy the cold water every summer.
>> Each mountain has beautiful valleys and waterfalls, so many people visit to enjoy the cold water every summer.
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