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2014-10-21 · 첨삭 강사 Nina

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When the people live in the earth without medicines,It will be terrible. Without anesthetic,the person who will have a sergery will be painful vwry much. Without antibiotic,the people who fight in a war will die. Without vaccine,the new virus like H5N1 and herpes-B virus will occupy the earth.

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I totally agree with your ideas TOM! I am proud of you! I can say that you are really learning new words and expressions these day. I encourage you to use it in class. It will help you compose simple to complex sentences. Don\'t give up, okay? Have a great night. Sweet dreams.Teacher Nina   When the people live in the earth without medicines,It will be terrible.>> When people live in the Earth without medicines, it will be terrible. Without anesthetic,the person who will have a sergery will be painful vwry much. >> Without anesthetic, the person who will have a surgery will be really painful. Without antibiotic,the people who fight in a war will die.>> Without antibiotic, the people who fight in a war will die. >> OR: Without antibiotic, the people who got hurt during a war will die. Without vaccine,the new virus like H5N1 and herpes-B virus will occupy the earth. >> Without vaccine, a new viruses like H5N1 and Herpes-B will spread in the Earth.

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