Hey~~

2012-01-02 · 첨삭 강사 Lorraine

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Happy New Year~! My resoultions are to learn salsa,spanish and english. I am so excited about my resolutions. Tell me about your resolutions and your love story. I am looking forward to hear that ;) Have a nice dayy my dear!

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Happy New Year too [이름] dear! You gave me a very interesting idea on what to do this year, to learn Salsa! Anyway, here is our company\'s email address: [이메일]  I\'m looking forward to see those pictures that you will send me.   Regarding my love life, oh well, it is very complicated and should I say, a disappointing story...  I have this suitor who\'s been courting me for more than a year. He\'s also a nurse and I met him during my work in the hospital before. Since then, he was very persistent in making me feel special. He sends me personalized letters and flowers every now and then. He always calls me even though it\'s a long distance call from London. Yes, I admit that he is very good looking and a God-fearing man. My family and friends like him a lot. At first, I failed to realize that I love him already because I was blinded by the fact that I\'m not yet over with my past relationship. But the time came when I knew in myself that I\'m ready to enter in a new commitment. I waited him to ask me again this ever cheesy line, \"Do you love me also?\", but he never did. Maybe, he got tired of waiting for me. I know it\'s my fault. I never learned from my past experience that I should always acknowledge other people\'s admiration towards me,.. that feelings also fade away with time. So, I just prayed to God that He will give me enough courage to face this with a willful heart. I know He is still writing the best love story for me. And you know what, God answered my prayers too quickly! After a day (and that was yesterday, January 1st), the dentist in the hospital where I used to work before, left a message in my Facebook. He said that since it is already a new year, he wanted to confide his feelings for me. He  expressed his intention to court me! And oh my goodness, the moment I read his message, I felt like I wanna jump and scream!  That dentist is admired by a lot of medical staffs in the hospital, may it be nurses, medtechs, or even doctors. I feel fortunate that after all these time, he has a special feeling for me and just kept it to himself. I\'m just hoping that I will make the right decisions this time. It seems my reply to you is A LOT LONGER than your message for me. Hahahaha! I hope next time, you\'ll write a longer composition, okay? Anyway, I made  some modifications in your letter. Please take a look:   Happy New Year~!>> Happy New Year! (Punctuation Mark)My resoultions are to learn salsa,spanish and english. >> My resolutions for this year are to learn how to dance Salsa and how to speak Spanish and English languages. (Sentence Construction)I am so excited about my resolutions.>> Correct! Very good! :)Tell me about your resolutions and your love story. >> Correct! Nice! :)I am looking forward to hear that ;)>> I am looking forward to hear that. (Punctuation mark)Have a nice dayy my dear! >> Have a nice day my dear! (Spelling)   See you tomorrow! Take care!  ~T. Lorraine~

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