^^hi!!

2010-10-08 · 첨삭 강사 Connie

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I want to know about you.^^ I heard that you have two job, day time as a nurse and evenig time as a English teacther. I am woking as a nurse internal medicine department at the hospital. I told you I am woking only day. The reason is, because I care only an outpatient. What department do you work ? I live in Busan, but it's not my hometown. My hometown is hamyang, small country. Where do you live? Where are you from?

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!..It was nice meeting you. I also want to know more about you especially that we are both nurses. I am so happy to hear about that.Yes, you are right. I am working as a nurse at daytime. I am working in a Pediatric department. So, my patients are all children. I am based here in the Philippines, here in Baguio City. Hope that you will enjoy having your class with me. See you and thank you for your composition. I really appreciate it! Have fun in learning English! I want to know about you.^^ >>>I want to know more about you. I heard that you have two job, day time as a nurse and evenig time as a English teacther. >>>I heard you have two jobs; you are working as a nurse at day time and English teacher at night time. I am woking as a nurse internal medicine department at the hospital. >>>I am working as a nurse in an internal medicine department at the hospital. I told you I am woking only day. >>>Just like what I have told you, I am working at day time only.The reason is, because I care only an outpatient. >>>The reason is because I care about outpatient only. What department do you work ? >>>correct sentence I live in Busan, but it's not my hometown. My hometown is hamyang, small country. >>>correct sentence Where do you live? >>>correct sentence Where are you from?  >>>correct sentence

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