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2010-11-09 · 첨삭 강사 Nick

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hello Cam Thank you for lecturing today~ I hope you would not misunderstand my opinion. I've sometimes heard that korea is in war. But this misunderstand comes from indifference and ignorance.Actually Korean don't think about war at all. we feel perfectly safe. I think it is like this. Every region in Rwanda(a nation in Africa) is in war, or every Jew carries a gun and kills Islamists, "Look!! There is Islamists!! Kill him!!.". It's not true. Even though Korean underwent war but they are not always worried about war again, like not every Jew doesn't kill Islamist.

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Hello there [이름],              I just received your composition. You have a very nice topic. War is really a controversy. It has been around since the ancient times. It has been a part of human survival. I wish someday war will end and our world will be at peace. Have a nice day and take care.   hello Cam>>>Hello Cam,Thank you for lecturing today~>>>Thank you for you lecture today.I hope you would not misunderstand my opinion.>>>I hope you did not misunderstand my opinion.I've sometimes heard that korea is in war. But this misunderstand comes from indifference and ignorance. >>>Sometimes I hear that Korea is at war. But this misunderstanding comes from indifferences and ignorance. Actually Korean don't think about war at all. we feel perfectly safe. >>>Actually Koreans don't think about war at all. We feel perfectly safe. I think it is like this. Every region in Rwanda(a nation in Africa) is in war, or every Jew carries a gun and kills Islamists, "Look!! There is Islamists!! Kill him!!.". It's not true. >>>I think it is like this. Every region in Rwanda (a nation in Africa) is at war, or every Jew that carries a gun kills a Muslim, and says "Look! There's a Muslim! Kill him!". That is not true. Even though Korean underwent war but they are not always worried about war again, like not every Jew doesn't kill Islamist. >>>Even though Koreans have undergone war, they are not always thinking about it and not every Jew kills Muslim.

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