Hi~~^^

2013-10-07 · 첨삭 강사 Mona

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Homeork~ ~~Why do you think there are still people who buy drugs or medicines that are not prescribe by the doctor?:~~ Hm.... I think it is a problem that do not settle today. People think this problem is easy. It is right! It is very easy. Why it is easy, becase people will abide by the law. Law do not allow buy the drug and buy the medicines that is not a process. Just, people do not abide by the law. As a result, It is problem that people follow the law or do not follow. If the people of a country know "drug is bad", the country would not allow the drug. Mission complete^^ student Kirk~~!

강사 첨삭

Hi Kirk!

You did well! Thank you for doing your composition.

I\'m glad that you have great ideas. Especially, about the things which are happening nowadays.

Have a great day!^^

Hm....
I think it is a problem that do not settle today.

>>> I think this is a problem which is difficult to settle nowadays.
People think this problem is easy.

>>CORRECT
It is right!

>>>CORRECT
It is very easy.

>>>CORRECT
Why it is easy, becase people will abide by the law.

>>>Why is it easy? It is easy because people will abide by the law.
Law do not allow buy the drug and buy the medicines that is not a process.

>>> Law doesn\'t allow people to buy drugs or medicines without the doctors\' prescriptions.
Just, people do not abide by the law.

>>>CORRECT
As a result, It is problem that people follow the law or do not follow.
 

>>As a result, it is a problem if people follow or don\'t follow the law. 
If the people of a country know \"drug is bad\", the country would not allow the drug.

>>> If the people in a country know that taking in drugs is bad, the government shouldn\'t allow it.^^ Mission completed!^^

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