Hi~

2014-03-03 · 첨삭 강사 camille

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I agree with that. I think the bullying is the most horrible thing to students even more than studying. So, every students have to got a responsibility and the adults have to make a powerful legal rules. Then, the students can have the responsibility by force. Eventually, it can be very helpful to decrease the bullying. :)

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Hi there baby^^

Happy Monday!

Thank you for doing your homework^^

I made some corrections!

See you later my dear^^

Have a great day and take care^^

xoxoT.Camille^^

I agree with that.

>> CORRECT^^

I think the bullying is the most horrible thing to students even more than studying.

>> I think that bullying is the most horrible thing to students; it is even more horrible than studying.

So, every students have to got a responsibility and the adults have to make a powerful legal rules.

>> So, every student has a responsibility and the adults have to create strict legal rules.

Then, the students can have the responsibility by force. Eventually, it can be very helpful to decrease the bullying. :)

>> CORRECT^^

>> Then, the students can have a forced responsibility. Eventually, it can be very helpful to decrease bullying. :)

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