Hi!

2014-03-10 · 첨삭 강사 Jessie

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Teacher! First of all, I'm really sorry about the missing call. I was having a get- together dinner with my academy's class mates. T.T I came to home at eleven, so I couldn't answer the call on the Friday. Nevertheless thank you for giving the homework and here's my homework! I totally agree that teacher should be paid according their ability. If their ability is good, student could get a great academic achieve. So, the payment can't be same between a competent teacher and an incompetent teacher. Above all, by making a difference about paying system, we can encourage teachers to improve their ability. And I believe that's the reason why the society have to be fair.

강사 첨삭

Hello there!^.^

Thank you for doing your homework and about last Friday\'s class, apology accepted!^.^

I hope you can find time to check the corrections I made and also the alternative

sentences that I put to make your sentences more meaningful.

If you have further questions, feel free to ask me in class!

See you then!

~~T. Lexi~~

Teacher! First of all, I\'m really sorry about the missing call.

>>Teacher, first of all, I am really sorry for missing your phone call.

I was having a get- together dinner with my academy\'s class mates. T.T

>>Correct.

or>>I had a get together with my class mates in my academy.

I came to home at eleven, so I couldn\'t answer the call on the Friday.

>>I came home at eleven so I couldn\'t answer your call last Friday.

Nevertheless thank you for giving the homework and here\'s my homework!
>>Correct.
I totally agree that teacher should be paid according their ability.

>>I total agree that a teacher should be paid according to their ability.

If their ability is good, student could get a great academic achieve.

>>If their ability is good, a student can get a great academic achievement.

So, the payment can\'t be same between a competent teacher and an incompetent teacher.

>>So, the payment will not be the same between a competent and an incompetent teacher.

Above all, by making a difference about paying system, we can encourage teachers to improve their ability.

>>Above all, by making a difference in the payment/salary system, we can encourage/motivate teachers to improve their ability.

And I believe that\'s the reason why the society have to be fair.

>>And I believe that it\'s the reason that the society has to be fair.

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