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2014-04-02 · 첨삭 강사 Shanee

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After your class, vet called us and he said he has nothing to do for my dog. Her condition was serious and It was worse than we thought. He said she'll die soon and we should ready for this. During the conversation, he seemed like he was recommending her to put to sleep. Ofcourse If she feels pain we should do that, but not now. And unfortunatliy, I should enter the hopital for a surgery and maybe I should stay there from a week to two weeks. Vet said she won't be alive for a long time like that. I won't be albe to be by her side when she pass away. It makes me frustrating. ps.It seems that I won't be able to have lessons on Thursday and Friday cuz of surgery. I'll get better after that days. :) See you soon!

강사 첨삭

Hi!

I feel sorry about the situation of your dog.

Thank you for sharing your story and what you feel towards your lovely pet.

The idea of your composition is clear and I love it. Kindly go over some of my corrections in the construction of your sentences.

Take care always and get well soon after your surgery!

Teacher Shanee ^^


After your class, vet called us and he said he has nothing to do for my dog.

>> The veterinarian called after our class. He said, he can no longer help my dog.
Her condition was serious and It was worse than we thought.

>> The condition was serious and getting worse than we thought.

He said she\'ll die soon and we should ready for this.

>> He said my dog will soon die and we should get ready for this.

During the conversation, he seemed like he was recommending her to put to sleep.

>> During our conversation, seemingly he was recommending to put my dog to sleep.

Ofcourse If she feels pain we should do that, but not now.

>> Of course we can do that considering her condition, but not now.

And unfortunatliy, I should enter theokey hopital for a surgery and maybe I should stay there from a week to two weeks.

>> Unfortunately, I was scheduled for a surgery and I need to stay in the hospital for one to two weeks.

Vet said she won\'t be alive for a long time like that.

>> The veterinarian said that my dog will not be alive for too long.

I won\'t be albe to be by her side when she pass away.

>> I would not be there on her side when she passes away.

It makes me frustrating.

>> I will be frustrated.
ps.It seems that I won\'t be able to have lessons on Thursday and Friday cuz of surgery.

>> P.S. It seems that I won\'t be able to have our lessons on Thursday and Friday because of my surgery.

I\'ll get better after that days. :)

>> I will get better after those days. :) 

See you soon!

>> Correct

 

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